Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' which affect the natural flow. Try to be more concise and avoid repeating words unnecessarily. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

Example: Yes, I often visit the library near my home because I enjoy reading. Whenever I get free time, I spend it there exploring new books, especially stories, which I love.

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and ensure your sentences are complete and coherent.

Example: In the library, I usually read books and complete my college homework. For example, when my professor assigns tasks in subjects like economics, I use the library resources to study and finish my work.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear due to repetition and incomplete sentences. Try to form a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. Avoid repeating words and ensure your answer is coherent and natural.

Example: Yes, when I was a child, I often went to the library with my grandfather. My friends and I used to do our homework there together and sometimes share pictures with each other.

Suggestion: Your answer is vague and relies on indirect information. Try to provide a clear opinion supported by specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid informal terms like 'Insta'.

Example: Yes, many Chinese children often visit libraries because they enjoy reading books. For instance, I have seen videos online showing kids spending time in libraries, which helps them learn and have fun.

× Yes, I often go to the library library so close to my home and I go library and umm, Community Center Brampton.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because it is so close to my home and I go to the library and, umm, Community Center Brampton.

The word 'library' was repeated unnecessarily and missing the preposition 'to' before 'library'. Also, 'library library' is incorrect plural usage here. Correcting to singular and adding 'to' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I go library and umm, Community Center Brampton.

✓ I go to the library and, umm, Community Center Brampton.

The verb 'go' requires the preposition 'to' before a place. Omitting 'to' is a common error. Adding 'to' before 'library' and 'Community Center Brampton' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× Whenever I will get chance, I usually go there.

✓ Whenever I get a chance, I usually go there.

In English, after 'whenever' we use the present tense to refer to future events, not 'will' plus verb. So 'Whenever I get a chance' is correct instead of 'Whenever I will get chance'.

× I usually spend my too much time on reading books because I love reading.

✓ I usually spend too much time reading books because I love reading.

The phrase 'my too much time' is incorrect. 'Too much time' is sufficient and does not need 'my'. Also, 'on reading books' should be 'reading books' without 'on'.

× I love, uh, new, new books that.

✓ I love, uh, new books like that.

The phrase 'new, new books that' is incomplete and awkward. Adding 'like that' clarifies the meaning. Also, removing the repeated 'new' corrects redundancy.

× Whenever I, my professor gave homework, I go to the library and, uh, re uh, solve my, uh, homework there and like an account account, so economics and other and read books there.

✓ Whenever my professor gave homework, I went to the library and solved my homework there, like in accounting, economics, and other subjects, and read books there.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the context is past, 'go' should be 'went' and 'solve' should be 'solved'. Also, 'an account account' is unclear and corrected to 'accounting'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× When I was a kid I I go, I I went library with my grandfather.

✓ When I was a kid, I went to the library with my grandfather.

The sentence incorrectly uses both present 'go' and past 'went'. Since the time is past, only 'went' is correct. Also, 'went library' needs the preposition 'to'.

× I have a lot of friends as well in my child's life.

✓ I had a lot of friends as well in my childhood.

'Child's life' is awkward; 'childhood' is the correct noun. Also, since the time is past, 'have' should be 'had'.

× We we all together do homework there and also sometime show pictures to each other on different different.

✓ We all did homework together there and sometimes showed pictures to each other of different things.

The sentence refers to past events, so present tense 'do' and 'show' should be past tense 'did' and 'showed'. Also, 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' and 'different different' is incomplete, corrected to 'different things'.

× Yes, China's kids often go to the library I see on the Internet on YouTube.

✓ Yes, Chinese kids often go to the library, I see on the Internet on YouTube.

'China's kids' is incorrect; the adjective form 'Chinese kids' is correct. Also, a comma is added for clarity.

× On the Insta, their kids usually go to the library and enjoy there by reading books.

✓ On Instagram, their kids usually go to the library and enjoy reading books there.

'On the Insta' is informal and missing the full name 'Instagram'. Also, 'enjoy there by reading books' is awkward; 'enjoy reading books there' is correct prepositional usage.