Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons using linking words to improve coherence.

Example: No, I don't go to the library regularly because I have a heavy study load and a part-time job at FedEx. Therefore, I usually read books online instead.

Suggestion: Improve your answer by using clearer sentence structure and linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and provide more specific details about what you enjoy about history books.

Example: When I visit the library, I usually choose history books because they help me understand different cultures and past events in depth.

Suggestion: Focus on using correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structure. Provide a concise answer with supporting details and use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, when I was in first grade, I used to go to the library with my tutor, who helped me choose poetry books to read.

Suggestion: Make your answer more coherent by organizing your ideas clearly and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words and provide specific examples to support your opinion.

Example: Yes, I believe many Chinese kids visit libraries because they are excellent sources of knowledge, offering various types of books, including history and other subjects.

× No, it's I don't go library regularly because it's very difficult for me to go library because I am a student and I have a lot of pressure of studying and I also do the part time work in FedEx in FedEx Ground sometime I read books online.

✓ No, I don't go to the library regularly because it's very difficult for me to go to the library since I am a student and I have a lot of pressure from studying. I also do part-time work at FedEx Ground. Sometimes I read books online.

The preposition 'to' is required after 'go' when referring to a place like 'library'. Also, 'pressure of studying' should be 'pressure from studying' to correctly express the source of pressure. 'Do the part time work in FedEx in FedEx Ground' is awkward; it should be 'do part-time work at FedEx Ground' to correctly use prepositions and article usage.

× When I visit the library, firstly I like to choose the history related book and I have a keen interest in reading the history related books because it's very easy to give knowledge regarding the culture and and the past history.

✓ When I visit the library, I first like to choose history-related books because I have a keen interest in reading them. They easily provide knowledge about culture and past history.

The phrase 'firstly' is better replaced with 'I first' for natural English. 'History related book' should be hyphenated as 'history-related books' to correctly form a compound adjective. 'It's very easy to give knowledge' is awkward; 'They easily provide knowledge' is clearer and more natural.

× Yes, I remember when I was young and I was studying first class, I go to the library with my tutor and they help. They provide me the book of book of poem then.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was young and studying first grade, I went to the library with my tutor and they helped me. They provided me with a book of poems then.

The verb 'go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past context. 'They help' should be 'they helped' and 'provide' should be 'provided' for past tense consistency. 'First class' is better expressed as 'first grade' in English. 'Book of book of poem' is incorrect; it should be 'a book of poems'. Also, 'provided me the book' should be 'provided me with a book' for correct verb-preposition usage.

× I think so the Chinese kids also go to the library because as you know libraries are good source of knowledge and they also provide the various type of library also give various types of book such as history related books, related books and many others I think.

✓ I think Chinese kids also go to the library because, as you know, libraries are a good source of knowledge. They also provide various types of books such as history-related books and many others, I think.

'Good source' needs the article 'a' to be grammatically correct. 'Provide the various type of library' is incorrect; it should be 'provide various types of books'. 'History related books' should be hyphenated as 'history-related books'. The sentence is also restructured for clarity and natural flow.