Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of saying 'I used to go to library to study because you could study in a group with my friends and there was a lot of resources over there,' you can say 'I used to go to the library during my undergraduate studies because it offered many resources and a good environment for group study with my friends.'

Example: I don't go to the library these days. However, during my undergraduate studies, I often visited the library because it provided many resources and a quiet place where my friends and I could study together effectively.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains hesitations ('I, I'). Try to avoid repeating the same information and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, be careful with grammar and sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'study with my friends' multiple times, you can say 'During my undergraduate studies, my two friends and I formed a study group and often used the library, especially during class breaks.'

Example: During my undergraduate studies, my two friends and I formed a study group. We often used the library to study together, especially during breaks between classes, because it was a quiet and convenient place.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant but can be improved by using more natural linking words and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of saying 'We did not have the chance to go to the library and in our village there was no Public Library also,' you can say 'There was no library at my school or in our village, so we had to study at home.'

Example: No, I didn't go to the library as a child because my school was in a rural area without a library. Also, our village didn't have a public library, so we had to study at home.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas logically and use linking words to connect them. Also, avoid repeating words and phrases unnecessarily. For example, you can say 'I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library because they prefer playing to studying. Since the library is not a place for playing, they may visit it only occasionally to study.'

Example: I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library because they usually prefer playing over studying. Since the library is a quiet place meant for study, children might visit it only sometimes when they need to focus on their homework.

× I used to go to library to study because you could study in a group with my friends and there was a lot of resources over there.

✓ I used to go to the library to study because you could study in a group with my friends and there were a lot of resources over there.

The phrase 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library' which is necessary when referring to a specific place. Also, 'there was a lot of resources' is incorrect because 'resources' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was'.

× I used to go to library to study because you could study in a group with my friends and there was a lot of resources over there.

✓ I used to go to the library to study because you could study in a group with my friends and there were a lot of resources there.

The phrase 'over there' is unnecessary and awkward in this context; simply 'there' is more appropriate to indicate the presence of resources at the library.

× Like I said, I usually study with my friends over there. Actually during my undergraduate studies, I, I and two of my friends were a group and we studied together all the time and it is a good place for us to study and we could study during the break of the classes.

✓ Like I said, I usually study with my friends there. Actually, during my undergraduate studies, two of my friends and I were a group and we studied together all the time. It was a good place for us to study and we could study during the breaks between classes.

The phrase 'I, I and two of my friends' is incorrect; the correct order is 'two of my friends and I'. Also, 'over there' can be simplified to 'there'. 'Break of the classes' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'breaks between classes'. The tense should be consistent, so 'it is' changes to 'it was' to match past context.

× Well, not really, because when I was a kid our school was in the rural area, so that school didn't have any library.

✓ Well, not really, because when I was a kid our school was in a rural area, so that school didn't have a library.

The phrase 'in the rural area' is incorrect because 'rural area' is a general term and does not require the definite article 'the'. Also, 'any library' is better expressed as 'a library' in this context.

× We did not have the chance to go to the library and in our village there was no Public Library also.

✓ We did not have the chance to go to the library and in our village there was no public library either.

'Public Library' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun. Also, 'also' at the end of the sentence is awkward; 'either' is more appropriate in negative sentences.

× Kids want to go to the library because they like they actually do not like to study.

✓ Kids want to go to the library because they actually do not like to study.

The phrase 'they like they actually do not like to study' is redundant and incorrect. Removing the first 'they like' clarifies the sentence.

× So it is not a place where you can play when you are at home.

✓ So it is not a place where you can play when you are at the library.

The original sentence contradicts itself by saying 'when you are at home' in a sentence about the library. Changing 'at home' to 'at the library' corrects the meaning.

× OK. The kids always love to play. So behind they study, Sometimes they study, sometimes they play and then go and do the studying again.

✓ OK. Kids always love to play. So after they study, sometimes they play, sometimes they study again, and then go back to studying.

The phrase 'behind they study' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'after they study'. Also, the sentence structure is awkward and repetitive; reordering improves clarity and flow.