Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng câu ngắn gọn hơn và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể hơn về lý do bạn thích mua sách.

Example: I don't often go to the library because I prefer buying books from bookstores. This way, I can reread them anytime without worrying about returning them. Moreover, owning books ensures their quality and condition, which matters a lot to me.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp và số nhiều/số ít trong câu. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động của bạn trong thư viện.

Example: In the library, I usually look for science books instead of academic ones because I want to expand my knowledge on different topics during my free time. Additionally, I enjoy relaxing there while exploring various opinions and ideas.

Suggestion: Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ cho câu trả lời về quá khứ và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và có cấu trúc tốt hơn với các liên từ để nối các ý.

Example: I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because my school didn't have one at that time. Many students had to repair their own books. Furthermore, the government didn't invest in building a library near our sports school.

Suggestion: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không trang trọng như 'Cause' và cải thiện ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là cấu trúc câu. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng hơn, sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

Example: I haven't lived in China, so I'm not sure how often Chinese kids go to the library. However, I think they probably visit libraries frequently because they have to study a lot and face pressure from their families and society.

× I don't often go to the library because I prefer to choose and buy books from bookstore because only books allow me to reread them anytime without worrying about returning them.

✓ I don't often go to the library because I prefer to choose and buy books from bookstores because only books allow me to reread them anytime without worrying about returning them.

The word 'bookstore' should be pluralized to 'bookstores' because it refers to bookstores in general, not a specific one. This is a singular and plural issue where the countable noun needs to be in plural form to match the context.

× I usually look for science book rather than academic ones because I want to expand my knowledge on different topic when free times.

✓ I usually look for science books rather than academic ones because I want to expand my knowledge on different topics when I have free time.

The noun 'science book' should be plural 'science books' to match the plural 'academic ones'. Also, 'different topic' should be 'different topics' to indicate multiple subjects. 'Free times' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'free time' as an uncountable noun.

× I usually look for science book rather than academic ones because I want to expand my knowledge on different topic when free times.

✓ I usually look for science books rather than academic ones because I want to expand my knowledge on different topics when I have free time.

The phrase 'expand my knowledge on different topic' should use 'on' correctly, but 'different topic' needs to be plural 'different topics'. Also, 'when free times' is incorrect; it should be 'when I have free time' to properly express the time condition.

× I don't go to the library when I was a kid because my school didn't have a library for students in that time.

✓ I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because my school didn't have a library for students at that time.

The sentence mixes present tense 'don't go' with past time 'when I was a kid'. It should be past tense 'didn't go' to match the past time context. Also, 'in that time' should be 'at that time' as the correct preposition for referring to a specific time.

× Many kids have to repair their own books.

✓ Many kids had to repair their own books.

Since the context is past ('when I was a kid'), the verb should be in past tense 'had to'. This is a past tense issue rather than singular/plural, but the sentence is otherwise correct in plural form.

× Moreover, the government didn't spend money to build a library near by our sports school to open the library.

✓ Moreover, the government didn't spend money to build a library near our sports school to open the library.

The phrase 'near by' should be 'near' as 'nearby' is an adjective or adverb, but here 'near' is the correct preposition. The rest of the sentence is in past tense and correct.

× 'Cause I didn't live in China, so I don't know much about often the Chinese kids go to the library.

✓ 'Cause I didn't live in China, so I don't know much about how often Chinese kids go to the library.

The phrase 'about often the Chinese kids go' is incorrect. It should be 'about how often Chinese kids go' to correctly introduce the frequency clause. Also, 'the Chinese kids' is better as 'Chinese kids' when speaking generally.

× But if to say I think they often go to the library because I know they have to study a lot and have pressure of their family and social expected.

✓ But if I were to say, I think they often go to the library because I know they have to study a lot and face pressure from their family and social expectations.

The phrase 'if to say' is incorrect; it should be 'if I were to say' or 'if I had to say'. Also, 'have pressure of their family and social expected' is incorrect; it should be 'face pressure from their family and social expectations' to correctly express the idea.