Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'my major focus on literature' nên là 'my major is literature'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp lại ý và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Hãy chú ý dùng thì đúng và cấu trúc câu chính xác.

Example: Yes, I often go to the library because I study literature. I usually spend time reading academic books that help me understand my subject better.

Suggestion: Bạn nên tránh dùng các cụm từ không cần thiết như 'As I have said before' và 'I think' nhiều lần. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có liên kết logic. Ngoài ra, hãy chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'books that related' nên là 'books that are related'.

Example: I usually look for academic books related to my major and spend about 30 minutes to a few hours studying in the library.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, dùng câu đơn giản, tránh dùng các cụm từ không cần thiết như 'you know'. Hãy sử dụng liên từ để câu văn trôi chảy hơn.

Example: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because I lived in a remote mountainous area without modern technology. But now, I have more opportunities to visit the library.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ 'children ought to aware' nên là 'children ought to be aware'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

Example: In my opinion, children in every country, including China, often go to the library because reading helps them improve their knowledge and adapt to modern technology.

× I'm really a big fan of going to the library because my major focus on literature, so I need to find more information or theories that relate to my studies which help me understand the subject better.

✓ I'm really a big fan of going to the library because my major focuses on literature, so I need to find more information or theories that relate to my studies which help me understand the subject better.

The verb 'focus' should be in the third person singular form 'focuses' to agree with the singular subject 'my major'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to present tense usage.

× For example, I usually spending time like reading academic.

✓ For example, I usually spend time reading academic materials.

The verb 'spending' is incorrectly used after 'usually'. The correct form is the base verb 'spend' after 'usually' to indicate habitual action. Also, 'academic' should be followed by a noun such as 'materials' for clarity.

× As I have said before, so I think I usually like find more information or academic books that related to my major in the library and I think that I usually spend like 30 minutes or even hours in the library.

✓ As I have said before, I think I usually like to find more information or academic books that are related to my major in the library, and I usually spend about 30 minutes or even hours there.

The conjunction 'so' is redundant after 'As I have said before'. Also, 'like find' should be 'like to find' for correct verb form. 'That related' needs the verb 'are' to be grammatically correct. 'Like 30 minutes' is informal; 'about 30 minutes' is better.

× So one of those kids, actually, I didn't have the chance to go to the library.

✓ So, as one of those kids, actually, I didn't have the chance to go to the library.

The sentence is missing a preposition 'as' to correctly express the idea. The past tense 'didn't have' is correct here.

× I live without entertainment, I live without modern technology, I live in a mountainous area that far from here.

✓ I lived without entertainment, without modern technology, in a mountainous area that is far from here.

The verb tense should be past 'lived' to match the context of childhood. Also, 'that far from here' needs the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct.

× But now I think I have the more opportunities to get along with that.

✓ But now I think I have more opportunities to get along with that.

The article 'the' before 'more opportunities' is unnecessary and incorrect here. 'More opportunities' is correct without 'the'.

× In my opinion, I've seen going to the library is not only for the China kids, because you know, in every nation, in every country, like children ought to aware the importance of reading to like improve their knowledge to to be exist in the modern technology that can prevent us to grow.

✓ In my opinion, I've seen that going to the library is not only for Chinese kids, because, you know, in every nation, in every country, children ought to be aware of the importance of reading to improve their knowledge and to exist in modern technology that can help us grow.

'China kids' should be 'Chinese kids' (adjective form). 'Ought to aware' is incorrect; it should be 'ought to be aware of'. 'To be exist' is incorrect; it should be 'to exist'. Also, 'prevent us to grow' is incorrect; 'help us grow' fits the intended meaning better.