Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is quite long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and completing your sentences clearly. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I go to the school library every day because it's a quiet place where I can concentrate on my homework. Additionally, I use it to prepare for group presentations and study with my classmates.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid filler phrases like 'you know'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

Example: I usually focus on finishing my homework because we have a lot of assignments at school. However, sometimes I read science fiction novels to relax and take a break from studying.

Suggestion: Your answer is quite long and contains some grammatical mistakes. Try to use past tense consistently and avoid unnecessary phrases. Also, make your sentences more natural and concise.

Example: To be honest, I rarely went to the school library when I was a child because I preferred playing outside with my friends rather than reading books in the library.

Suggestion: Your answer has several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid repeating words unnecessarily and use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, from what I've observed, many Chinese parents have strict rules, so their children often go to the school library. However, my parents are different; they never pressured me to go there.

× Yes, I go to the school library on a daily basis and the reason is that I think the school library is a quiet place for me to help me concentrate on my homework and apart from that, it's a good place for me to prepare for group presentation and do some.

✓ Yes, I go to the school library on a daily basis because I think the school library is a quiet place that helps me concentrate on my homework. Apart from that, it's a good place for me to prepare for group presentations and do some work.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'and the reason is that' as a conjunction, which makes the sentence awkward and run-on. Replacing it with 'because' clarifies the cause-effect relationship. Also, 'group presentation' should be plural as it refers to a general activity, and 'do some' is incomplete, so 'do some work' is added for clarity.

× Well, I almost dedicated myself to finish my homework because, you know, in my school the work is so the assignment is so much.

✓ Well, I almost dedicated myself to finishing my homework because, you know, in my school the assignments are so much.

The phrase 'dedicated myself to finish' is incorrect; after 'dedicate oneself to', the verb should be in the -ing form ('finishing'). Also, 'the assignment is so much' is ungrammatical; it should be plural 'assignments are so much' to agree with the plural subject and express quantity.

× And sometimes I just read some sci-fi novels to relax myself.

✓ And sometimes I just read some sci-fi novels to relax myself.

This sentence is grammatically correct and fits the present tense context, so no correction is needed.

× Well, to be honest, it's a shame that I hardly ever go to the school library when I was a kid, because when I was young I preferred to go to outside to play with my friends rather than stay in the library to read some boring books.

✓ Well, to be honest, it's a shame that I hardly ever went to the school library when I was a kid, because when I was young I preferred to go outside to play with my friends rather than stay in the library to read some boring books.

The phrase 'hardly ever go' should be in past tense 'hardly ever went' to match the time frame 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'go to outside' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go outside' without 'to'.

× Well actually yes, from what I've observed, most Chinese people parents, they have strict rules on their children.

✓ Well actually yes, from what I've observed, most Chinese parents have strict rules for their children.

The phrase 'most Chinese people parents' is redundant and incorrect; it should be 'most Chinese parents'. Also, 'they have' is unnecessary after 'most Chinese parents' as the subject is already clear. 'Rules on their children' should be 'rules for their children' for correct preposition use.

× So their children are actually usually go to the school library.

✓ So their children actually usually go to the school library.

The phrase 'are actually usually go' is incorrect because 'are' and 'go' cannot be used together here. The correct form is 'actually usually go' to maintain subject-verb agreement and proper verb form.

× But fortunately my parents is different from them.

✓ But fortunately my parents are different from them.

The subject 'my parents' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.