Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: ຄວນປັບປຸງການໃຊ້ພາສາໃຫ້ຖືກຕ້ອງ ແລະ ສະຫຼຸບໃຫ້ກວ່ານີ້ດ້ວຍປະໂຫຍກທີ່ຊັດເຈນ ແລະ ບໍ່ຄວນມີຄໍາຜິດ ຫຼື ຄໍາທີ່ບໍ່ເໝາະສົມ. ຄວນໃຊ້ຄໍາສັບທີ່ກ່ອນໜ້າແລະຕິດຕາມດ້ວຍລາຍລະອຽດທີ່ຊັດເຈນ.

Example: Yes, I often go to the library because it is my favorite place. Since I was a child, I have enjoyed reading books there and spending time alone. My favorite library is at my university because it is spacious and peaceful, which helps me concentrate.

Suggestion: ຄວນປັບປຸງຄວາມຊັດເຈນແລະຄວາມຖືກຕ້ອງຂອງປະໂຫຍກ ແລະ ລະບຸກະວິທີທີ່ທ່ານເຮັດໃນຫ້ອງສະໝຸດຢ່າງຊັດເຈນ ພ້ອມໃຊ້ຄໍາເຊື່ອມຕໍ່ເພື່ອເຮັດໃຫ້ຄວາມຄິດຂອງທ່ານລະບຸໄດ້ດີຂຶ້ນ.

Example: Usually, I read my own books quietly in the library because I prefer to study alone. I avoid chatting with others since there are strict rules about noise, which helps maintain a peaceful environment.

Suggestion: ຄວນໃຊ້ຄຳກິດໃນອະດີດແບບຖືກຕ້ອງ ແລະ ລະບຸລາຍລະອຽດທີ່ຊັດເຈນກ່ອນຈະເວົ້າເຖິງຄວາມຮູ້ສຶກ ເພື່ອເພີ່ມຄວາມນ່າສົນໃຈໃນການຕອບ.

Example: Yes, I often went to the library when I was a kid. I remember the stairs, the many books, and the activities I enjoyed there. My favorite book was about Serena, a red-haired girl with dragons, which made me feel fulfilled and sparked my imagination.

Suggestion: ຄວນລະບຸຄວາມຄິດແບບມີຫຼັກການ ແລະ ປະກອບດ້ວຍຂໍ້ມູນທີ່ຊັດເຈນ ເພື່ອເພີ່ມຄວາມນ່າເຊື່ອຖື ແລະ ລະບຸຄຳສັບທີ່ເໝາະສົມກັບບົດບາດ.

Example: As a Thai student, I am not sure if Chinese kids often go to the library. However, I assume they do because education is very competitive in China. I have heard that they study for many hours daily, so visiting the library is likely part of their routine.

× Yes, I often go to library because that's my favorite person.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library because that's my favorite place.

The phrase 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library'. Also, 'favorite person' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'favorite place' to refer to the library. Articles are important to specify nouns correctly.

× I was a child, I remembered I go there to read the books and be on my own.

✓ When I was a child, I remembered going there to read books and be on my own.

The verb 'go' should be in the gerund form 'going' after 'remembered' to indicate a past habitual action. Also, 'I was a child' should be connected properly with a conjunction or rephrased for clarity.

× And my favorite library is located at my university since it's big and also make me feel calm and a lot of people they're starting.

✓ And my favorite library is located at my university since it's big and also makes me feel calm, and a lot of people are studying there.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'library'. The phrase 'a lot of people they're starting' is incorrect; it should be 'a lot of people are studying'. Also, the sentence needs proper conjunctions and verb agreement.

× As I mentioned before, I used to see the read my own book quietly being my on my own and I'm not chit chat there with other people because there's a lot of regulations and military things I have to do if I was in the Riberies.

✓ As I mentioned before, I used to read my own book quietly, being on my own, and I don't chat there with other people because there are a lot of regulations and rules I have to follow if I am in the library.

The phrase 'used to see the read' is incorrect; it should be 'used to read'. 'Being my on my own' is incorrect; it should be 'being on my own'. 'I'm not chit chat' should be 'I don't chat'. 'Military things' is likely a mishearing or mistranslation; 'rules' fits better. 'If I was' should be 'if I am' for present conditional. 'Riberies' is likely 'library'.

× Yes, I often go to the library since I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I have often gone to the library since I was a kid.

The phrase 'I often go' conflicts with 'since I was a kid' which requires present perfect tense 'have gone' to indicate an action continuing from past to present.

× I remembers all of the stair, all of the books there's and often the activities I was doing.

✓ I remember all of the stairs, all of the books there, and often the activities I was doing.

'Remembers' should be 'remember' to agree with the singular subject 'I'. 'Stair' should be plural 'stairs'. 'There's' is incorrect here; 'there' is correct.

× I my favorite books it's Serena, which is the red hair girl with the Dragons.

✓ My favorite book is Serena, which is about a red-haired girl with dragons.

'I my favorite books' is incorrect; it should be 'My favorite book'. 'Red hair girl' should be 'red-haired girl'. 'Dragons' should not be capitalized unless a proper noun.

× It's make me feel fulfillments and I enjoy imagining there.

✓ It makes me feel fulfilled and I enjoy imagining there.

'It's make' should be 'It makes' to agree with singular subject. 'Fulfillments' is incorrect; 'fulfilled' is the correct adjective. 'Imagining there' is acceptable but could be improved to 'imagining things there'.

× As a Thai student, I don't know whether the Chinese kid often told to go to the library, but based on my assumptions I think they do because they have a lot of competitions in learning and studying.

✓ As a Thai student, I don't know whether Chinese kids often go to the library, but based on my assumptions, I think they do because they have a lot of competitions in learning and studying.

'The Chinese kid' should be plural 'Chinese kids' to match 'they'. 'Often told to go' is incorrect; it should be 'often go'.

× I heard they study for tense hours per day, so I think they will definitely go there.

✓ I heard they study for ten hours per day, so I think they will definitely go there.

'Tense hours' is a typo; it should be 'ten hours'.