Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains filler words like "you know" and "some" which reduce clarity. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy by directly stating your points. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

Example: Yes, I often go to the library because it provides a quiet environment where I can focus on my studies without distractions. Additionally, I enjoy reading and borrowing books there, which helps me learn more effectively.

Suggestion: Your answer is vague and contains many filler phrases such as "it depends," "I think," and "you know," which weaken your response. Try to give a direct answer with clear supporting details and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Usually, I go to the library to read and borrow books when I have free time. However, if I have assignments, I use the quiet environment there to concentrate better on my work.

Suggestion: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity due to filler words and awkward phrasing. Avoid repeating phrases like "used to go to the library" multiple times. Instead, provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I often visited the library during my school days. During library periods, teachers introduced us to new books and topics from around the world, which helped expand our knowledge.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks specific examples. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "it depends" and "library library." Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples, using linking words to connect your ideas.

Example: Whether Chinese kids often go to the library depends on their living conditions. Generally, children from families with better resources have access to libraries, which offer a quiet place to study and focus on their education.

× I love to go to the library because it is a place where I can focus on my study and on myself and all over the day I find that I want to find a place where I can, you know, sit and study quietly without anyone disturbing me.

✓ I love going to the library because it is a place where I can focus on my studies and on myself, and throughout the day I find that I want to find a place where I can, you know, sit and study quietly without anyone disturbing me.

The phrase 'love to go' is grammatically acceptable but 'love going' is more natural when expressing enjoyment of an activity. Also, 'focus on my study' should be 'focus on my studies' to correctly use the plural form for academic work. 'All over the day' is incorrect; 'throughout the day' is the proper expression.

× I love to go to the library because it is a place where I can focus on my study and on myself and all over the day I find that I want to find a place where I can, you know, sit and study quietly without anyone disturbing me.

✓ I love going to the library because it is a place where I can focus on my studies and on myself, and throughout the day I find that I want to find a place where I can, you know, sit and study quietly without anyone disturbing me.

The word 'study' in this context should be pluralized to 'studies' because it refers to academic work in general, which is countable and usually plural.

× And I can read books also and I even can borrow some books from there.

✓ I can also read books and even borrow some books from there.

The phrase 'I even can borrow' is awkward; the modal verb 'can' should precede 'even' or be rephrased. Also, 'and I can read books also' is better as 'I can also read books' for natural word order.

× So it is a quiet, you know, some a place where I love.

✓ So it is a quiet place that I love.

The original sentence has redundant and misplaced words ('you know', 'some a') which disrupt sentence structure. Simplifying to 'a quiet place that I love' corrects the structure and clarity.

× When I'm free, I'm relaxed. I usually go there to read books and, you know, borrow books, some books.

✓ When I'm free and relaxed, I usually go there to read and borrow some books.

The phrase 'borrow books, some books' is redundant; 'borrow some books' is sufficient. Also, combining 'when I'm free, I'm relaxed' into 'when I'm free and relaxed' improves flow.

× But if I have some assignment or a work or so, I usually go there so no one can disturb me and I can focus on my work and focus on my study rather than somebody disturbing me.

✓ But if I have some assignments or work, I usually go there so no one can disturb me and I can focus on my work and my studies rather than being disturbed by somebody.

'Assignment' should be pluralized to 'assignments' to match 'some'. 'A work' is incorrect; 'work' is uncountable and does not take an article. 'Focus on my study' should be 'my studies' for the same reason.

× In my school days, when I was in school, we used to go to the library when there was a period of library where we used to go to the library to read books, to explore new books.

✓ In my school days, when I was in school, we used to go to the library during library periods to read and explore new books.

The phrase 'a period of library' is awkward; 'library periods' is the correct term. Also, repeating 'we used to go to the library' is redundant and can be simplified.

× We used to have, you know, teacher used to give us new information about the new topics and new books all over the about all over the world.

✓ We used to have teachers who gave us new information about new topics and new books from all over the world.

The phrase 'all over the about all over the world' is incorrect and redundant. 'From all over the world' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, 'teacher used to give' should be 'teachers who gave' for subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× So mostly people who can afford and have the facility facilities, those children can go to the library because library library provides you quiet environment where you can focus on yourself, on your studies.

✓ So mostly people who can afford and have the facilities, those children can go to the library because the library provides a quiet environment where you can focus on yourself and your studies.

'Facility' should be pluralized to 'facilities' to match the context. 'Library library' is a repetition error; only one 'library' is needed. Also, 'provides you quiet environment' should be 'provides a quiet environment' for correct article usage.