Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to use more natural English expressions and correct grammar. For example, say "These days, I don't go to the library anymore" instead of "This day I don't go to library anymore." Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

Example: These days, I don't go to the library anymore, but when I was in college, I used to go every day because it was quiet and the atmosphere motivated me to study for my exams.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer clearer. For example, use "Currently, I am studying for the GMAT because I am preparing for my master's degree."

Example: I usually study for my exams in the library. Currently, I am preparing for the GMAT because I want to pursue a master's degree.

Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and add linking words for coherence. For example, say "I didn't go to the library much when I was a kid because I usually played with my friends or did my homework in my free time."

Example: I didn't go to the library much when I was a kid because I usually played with my friends or did my homework during my free time.

Suggestion: Avoid vague expressions like "I guess" and provide more specific reasons. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Example: Based on my experience, Chinese kids often go to the library because they value education and like to study in a quiet environment.

× This day I don't go to library anymore, but when I was in college, I used to go to library every day because it is quiet and the atmosphere of the library make me want to keep reading and studying for my exam.

✓ These days I don't go to the library anymore, but when I was in college, I used to go to the library every day because it is quiet and the atmosphere of the library makes me want to keep reading and studying for my exam.

The phrase 'This day' should be 'These days' to indicate the current time period. Also, 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'library'. Additionally, 'the atmosphere of the library make me' has a subject-verb agreement error; 'make' should be 'makes' because 'atmosphere' is singular.

× I usually study for my exam so this day I study for my GMAT since I'm preparing for my master degrees.

✓ I usually study for my exams, so these days I am studying for my GMAT since I'm preparing for my master's degree.

The phrase 'this day' should be 'these days' to indicate the current period. 'Study for my exam' should be plural 'exams' if referring generally. 'I study' should be present continuous 'I am studying' to indicate an ongoing action. 'Master degrees' should be 'master's degree' as it is a singular degree with possessive form.

× No, I didn't go to library a lot when I was a kid because in my free time I just playing with my friend or did my homework.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library a lot when I was a kid because in my free time I just played with my friends or did my homework.

'Go to library' needs the definite article 'the'. 'Just playing' is incorrect after 'I'; it should be past tense 'just played' to match the past context. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the general meaning.

× Based on my experience, I think so. In my perspective, Chinese kids are really smart, so I guess they are going to the library a lot.

✓ Based on my experience, I think so. From my perspective, Chinese kids are really smart, so I guess they go to the library a lot.

'In my perspective' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'From my perspective'. 'They are going to the library a lot' suggests a continuous action, but the simple present 'they go to the library a lot' is more appropriate for habitual actions.