Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and structured. Try to start with a direct response to the question, then add supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid repeating similar ideas about quietness and focus multiple times.

Example: I don't go to the library very often nowadays, but I used to visit it frequently when I was studying because it was a quiet place where I could concentrate well. In the future, I hope to return more often when I resume my studies.

Suggestion: Your answer is detailed and relevant, but it could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by avoiding repetition of similar points about quietness and concentration. Also, try to keep your answer within five sentences for clarity and effectiveness.

Example: Usually, I study and conduct research in the library. When I was at university, I enjoyed going to a large, beautiful library where I could work on projects with my friends. Because it was quiet and peaceful, I found it easier to concentrate.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question well and provides specific reasons, which is good. However, try to organise your response with clear linking words to improve flow and avoid repeating the idea of quietness multiple times. Also, aim for more concise sentences.

Example: I didn't go to the library much as a child, but during school and university, I visited it frequently. This was because my home environment was often noisy due to my family being around, so the library offered a quiet place where I could focus on my studies.

Suggestion: Your answer is honest but could be improved by expanding your response with a relevant opinion or comparison, using linking words to connect ideas. This will make your answer more informative and engaging.

Example: I'm not very familiar with the habits of Chinese children regarding library visits. However, in Brazil, where I come from, teachers encourage students to use the library regularly to support their learning.

× Maybe in the future when I'm back to study, I'll go back to the library more.

✓ Maybe in the future when I go back to study, I'll go back to the library more.

The phrase 'when I'm back to study' incorrectly uses the preposition 'to' after 'back'. The correct expression is 'go back to study' or 'when I go back to study'. Using 'go back to' indicates returning to an activity or place. Therefore, 'when I go back to study' is the proper form.

× Back in the days when I was going to uni, they used to have this beautiful massive library that I would love to go to and study there with my friends.

✓ Back in the days when I was going to uni, they used to have this beautiful massive library where I would love to go and study with my friends.

The phrase 'library that I would love to go to and study there' is redundant and awkward. Using 'where' is more appropriate to indicate the place for studying. Also, 'study there' is unnecessary after 'go to'. Therefore, 'library where I would love to go and study' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Not really when I was a kid, but when I was in school and university I used to go to the library quite a lot, especially because at home I used to have such a chaotic environment, so loud because of my brother and my dad.

✓ Not really when I was a kid, but when I was in school and university I used to go to the library quite a lot, especially because at home I had such a chaotic environment, very loud because of my brother and my dad.

The phrase 'I used to have such a chaotic environment, so loud' is awkward. It's better to say 'I had such a chaotic environment, very loud' to describe the state. Also, 'used to have' is acceptable but 'had' is more natural here. The preposition use is acceptable but the sentence structure can be improved for clarity.

× So it was good to go to the library to get some work done to study since it's quiet and peaceful.

✓ So it was good to go to the library to get some work done and to study since it's quiet and peaceful.

The original sentence uses 'to get some work done to study' which is confusing. Using 'and to study' clarifies that both actions are intended. This corrects the prepositional phrase and improves sentence clarity.