Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and provides good reasons, but it is a bit lengthy and slightly repetitive. Try to keep your answers concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I often went to the library during my graduation because it was quiet and helped me focus on my assignments. Moreover, it offered a wide range of free resources, which was very helpful.

Suggestion: Your answer contains useful information but is somewhat repetitive and lacks clear structure. Try to organise your points logically using linking words and avoid repeating the same ideas. Also, be careful with grammar and sentence clarity.

Example: I usually go to the library with my friends to study and exchange resources. Additionally, I look for academic papers to help with our assignments because the peaceful environment makes studying easier.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use simpler sentences and correct grammar. Also, provide clear reasons and use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: No, I did not go to the library much as a kid because I preferred outdoor activities and did not enjoy reading. Although we had library periods at school, I found them boring and did not like going there.

Suggestion: Your answer tries to provide an opinion but is unclear and contains some irrelevant or confusing information. Avoid speculation and focus on clear, relevant points. Also, check your grammar and word choice, for example, 'a piece' should be 'peace'.

Example: I am not Chinese, so I am not sure. However, I have seen in dramas that Chinese students often study hard and spend long hours in the library due to academic pressure.

× Yes, during my graduation I went to the library a lot of times because it's a quiet environment and I could focus on my assignments without distractions.

✓ Yes, during my graduation I went to the library many times because it was a quiet environment and I could focus on my assignments without distractions.

The phrase 'a lot of times' is informal and less appropriate in this context; 'many times' is more suitable. Also, 'it's' should be 'it was' to maintain past tense consistency with 'went' and 'could'.

× I usually go with my friends to study and exchange resources and complete our assignments and find new academic papers and resources for further help of help with our assignments.

✓ I usually go with my friends to study, exchange resources, complete our assignments, and find new academic papers and resources for further help with our assignments.

The phrase 'help of help with' is incorrect; it should be 'help with'. Also, the sentence is a run-on and needs commas to separate the activities clearly for better readability.

× No, when I was a kid I was more of a outdoor person and I did not have the habit of reading and the academic one of that difficult to require me to go to the library.

✓ No, when I was a kid I was more of an outdoor person and I did not have the habit of reading, and the academic demands were not difficult enough to require me to go to the library.

The article 'a' before 'outdoor' should be 'an' because 'outdoor' starts with a vowel sound. The phrase 'the academic one of that difficult' is unclear and grammatically incorrect; it is corrected to 'the academic demands were not difficult enough' for clarity and correctness.

× But we did have library periods and they were really boring for me, so I did not prefer going there.

✓ But we did have library periods, and they were really boring for me, so I did not prefer going there.

A comma is needed before 'and' to separate the two independent clauses properly, improving sentence structure and readability.

× Well, I am not Chinese, so I don't know, but according to the dramas I've watched, they have really strong academic background and they have a lot of pressure, so they frequently visit the library for very long hours to study there because the household is quite problematic and they really want a piece.

✓ Well, I am not Chinese, so I don't know, but according to the dramas I've watched, they have a really strong academic background and a lot of pressure, so they frequently visit the library for very long hours to study there because the household is quite problematic and they really want some peace.

The phrase 'a really strong academic background' needs the article 'a'. 'They have a lot of pressure' is correct but 'a lot of' is a quantifier and should be followed by a noun without 'have' repeated unnecessarily. 'They really want a piece' is incorrect; it should be 'some peace' to convey the intended meaning of wanting quiet or calm.