List— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct verb forms, and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add a linking word when giving an example. Use specific vocabulary (e.g., grocery list, shopping trip) and quantify or describe items to make details concrete.

Example: I usually don't make a grocery list, although I know it would help. Recently I've been trying to change this habit because I often forget small items. For instance, last week I had to return to the store twice to buy milk and bread.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence and use more precise language. Replace vague phrases ("it works") with specific benefits (helps me prioritise, meet deadlines). Remove unnecessary brand names unless relevant. Add linking words to show cause and effect (e.g., because, therefore).

Example: Yes, I always make a work list because it helps me prioritise tasks and meet deadlines. As a lawyer I often have strict deadlines, so having a list ensures I complete important filings on time and avoid negative consequences.

Suggestion: Provide a clear reason with correct grammar and coherent structure. Start with a topic sentence that answers generally, then give personal example. Avoid repetitions and unclear phrases ('a a trust about my memory', 'not decent way'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' and be specific about reasons (forgetfulness, preference for flexibility).

Example: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to rely on their memory and value flexibility. For example, I tend to keep tasks in my head because I trust my memory, although I know this can sometimes lead to forgetting things.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence and give concise reasons using linking words. Replace informal phrases ('old fashioned I guess') with concise explanations (I prefer tactile notes). Mention a specific benefit or situation to make it concrete and keep to 3–4 sentences.

Example: I prefer to make lists on paper because I like the tactile feel of pen on paper and it helps me remember tasks better. For instance, writing a shopping list by hand makes me more confident that I will follow it when I go to the store.

× I recently uh, trying to change this habit because I forget some small items.

✓ I recently tried to change this habit because I forget some small items.

The original uses 'trying' without an auxiliary verb, creating a grammatically incomplete present participle phrase. The context indicates a past attempt ('recently'), so use the past simple 'tried'. Suggestion: use an appropriate auxiliary with -ing (I am trying) for present continuous or use past simple (I tried) for a completed recent action.

× For example, last week I went to the store 2 times.

✓ For example, last week I went to the store two times.

Numerals in informal speech are acceptable, but in writing 'two' is preferred; this is mainly a style correction. No grammatical plural issue here, but ensure number words are written out in formal responses.

× Yes, I always make a list when I work and it works because I'm a lawyer and I have Citrix deadlines so I have to obey them.

✓ Yes, I always make a list when I work and it works because I'm a lawyer and I have Citrix deadlines, so I have to meet them.

The phrase 'obey them' is odd with 'deadlines'; deadlines are 'met' or 'observed', not 'obeyed'. Also add a comma before 'so' to join clauses. Use 'meet' for correctness.

× If I don't, there will be some consequences, so I have to be careful about that.

✓ If I don't, there will be some consequences, so I have to be careful about them.

The pronoun 'that' refers to a singular idea; 'consequences' is plural, so 'them' is the correct plural pronoun. Use consistent number agreement between noun and pronoun.

× First of all I'm one of those people and I don't like it making a list so I prefer to keep them in my mind and I have a a trust about my memory.

✓ First of all, I'm one of those people and I don't like making a list, so I prefer to keep things in my mind and I trust my memory.

Several pronoun and noun issues: 'don't like it making a list' is ungrammatical — use 'don't like making a list'. 'Keep them in my mind' is wrong because 'them' lacks a clear plural antecedent; use 'things' or 'items'. 'I have a a trust about my memory' is incorrect; say 'I trust my memory'. Added commas for clarity.

× I know it's not decent way but still it's I am.

✓ I know it's not a good way, but that's how I am.

Original is ungrammatical and awkward. 'Not decent way' needs an article and better adjective: 'not a good way'. 'but still it's I am' is incorrect word order and redundancy; use 'but that's how I am' to express the intended meaning.

× I usually prefer to make a list on paper because I like the feeling of papers and pens and I'm an old fashioned person I guess and it is like a habit for me.

✓ I usually prefer to make a list on paper because I like the feel of paper and pens, and I'm an old-fashioned person, I guess, and it's become a habit for me.

Use 'the feel of paper' rather than 'the feeling of papers'. 'Old-fashioned' needs a hyphen. Add commas to separate clauses. 'It is like a habit for me' is awkward; 'it's become a habit for me' is natural.

× It makes me more confident about my notes and follow them.

✓ It makes me more confident about my notes and helps me follow them.

The clause 'and follow them' lacks a subject; add 'helps me' to make a complete verb phrase. Ensure parallel structure and include subject where needed.