List— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and a bit repetitive. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Example: Yes, I usually make a shopping list to ensure I don't forget anything. For example, when I moved to Afghanistan, I started writing down the items I needed before going to the market. This helps me save time and avoid unnecessary purchases.

Suggestion: Your answer lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid vague phrases.

Example: Yes, I make lists for my work because they help me stay organised. For instance, I write down tasks on paper and sometimes stick them on the wall as reminders. This method is very effective in managing my workload.

Suggestion: Your answer is thoughtful but could be more concise and better structured. Avoid unnecessary phrases and provide clear reasons with linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to rely on memory. However, I believe it depends on the individual, as some can manage tasks without writing them down. Personally, I find lists very helpful for staying organised.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but a bit wordy. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating similar phrases.

Example: I used to write lists in my diary, which contained my personal information. However, recently I prefer using my smartphone to make lists because it is more convenient and accessible.

× To be honest, I don't remember the days as I was living in Peshawar, but when I came to Afghanistan, it's common for me to have some lists of shops and take notes in order to purchase all the things I needed.

✓ To be honest, I don't remember the days when I was living in Peshawar, but when I came to Afghanistan, it became common for me to have some shopping lists and take notes in order to purchase all the things I needed.

The original sentence lacks the conjunction 'when' to connect the clause 'I was living in Peshawar' properly, which affects sentence clarity and structure (Grammar problem type 26). Also, 'it's common for me' should be in past tense 'it became common for me' to match the past context. Additionally, 'some lists of shops' is awkward; 'some shopping lists' is more natural.

× it's common for me to have some lists of shops and take notes in order to purchase all the things I needed.

✓ it became common for me to have some shopping lists and take notes in order to purchase all the things I needed.

The phrase 'some lists of shops' is incorrect because 'lists of shops' implies lists containing shop names, which is unlikely the intended meaning. The correct phrase is 'shopping lists' which refers to lists of items to buy. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers and noun phrases (Grammar problem type 14).

× So whenever I have something to study or something to complete in my work, I always keep things and I used to ride them on a piece of paper and also hold them on a wall.

✓ So whenever I have something to study or something to complete in my work, I always keep things and I used to write them on a piece of paper and also hang them on a wall.

The word 'ride' is incorrect here; the intended verb is 'write' (to record notes). Also, 'hold them on a wall' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'hang' when referring to placing items on a wall. These are errors in verb choice and usage (Grammar problem type 9).

× Well, if I say that they're lazy and they don't take the advantage of their times.

✓ Well, if I say that they're lazy and they don't take advantage of their time.

The phrase 'take the advantage' is incorrect; the article 'the' should be omitted. Also, 'their times' is incorrect; the singular 'time' is used when referring to the concept of time in general. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers and pronouns (Grammar problem types 11 and 12).

× So I would be a person who's showing off himself.

✓ So I would be a person who's showing himself off.

The reflexive pronoun 'himself' is misplaced. The correct phrase is 'showing himself off' where the reflexive pronoun follows the verb phrase. This is an incorrect reflexive pronoun use (Grammar problem type 15).

× I always keep things and I used to ride them on a piece of paper and also hold them on a wall.

✓ I always keep things and I used to write them on a piece of paper and also hang them on a wall.

The preposition 'on' is correct with 'a piece of paper' but 'hold them on a wall' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'hang' for placing items on a wall. This is an incorrect use of prepositions and verbs (Grammar problem type 11).

× But in the recent time, as I have access to smartphone, I write them on the smartphone.

✓ But recently, as I have access to a smartphone, I write them on my smartphone.

The phrase 'in the recent time' is awkward; 'recently' is more natural. Also, 'access to smartphone' lacks an article; it should be 'a smartphone'. Additionally, 'the smartphone' is too general; 'my smartphone' is more appropriate. These are errors in article use and tense (Grammar problem types 6 and 22).