Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases. For example, say you enjoy singing because it connects you with people and expresses emotions, and give a concrete example (e.g., concerts).

Example: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me connect with others and express my emotions. For example, when I attend concerts I meet people from different backgrounds who share my interests, which makes me feel excited and inspired.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and clearer sequence. Begin with a direct response about past lessons, then explain why you stopped, using linking words like 'however' and 'because'. Avoid double negatives and unclear phrases.

Example: Yes, I took singing lessons at school from my music teacher. However, I found it quite challenging and lacked confidence in my voice, so I decided to stop attending the classes.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give specific detail about what you would sing and how you would prepare. Use linking words and correct phrasing (e.g., 'I would like to sing for my parents on their anniversary because...'). Avoid vague expressions like 'my thinking is not very capable.'

Example: I would like to sing for my parents on their anniversary because they mean a lot to me. I plan to practice a simple love song for a few weeks and maybe write short lyrics, so I can give them a heartfelt performance.

Suggestion: State your opinion clearly, then support it with two concise, specific examples using linking words ('for example', 'also', 'moreover'). Avoid repetition and filler words.

Example: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness. For example, at weddings singers create a joyful atmosphere that helps guests celebrate, and at concerts people often feel united and excited when they sing along.

× Yes, I really like singing and I really interested to go in concert because, uh, there are different people from different background and I can communicate with them and we share similar interest and moreover singing like, uh, when Asim as her sings a song.

✓ Yes, I really like singing and I am really interested in going to concerts because there are people from different backgrounds and I can communicate with them; we share similar interests. Moreover, singing, for example when Asim sings a song, makes me feel passionate.

Errors involve incorrect prepositions and verb forms: 'interested to go' should be 'interested in going to' (use 'interested in' + gerund and 'go to' a concert); 'from different background' needs plural 'backgrounds'; 'share similar interest' should be 'share similar interests'. Also sentence was run-on and unclear; rephrased for clarity. Suggestion: use 'interested in' + '-ing', pluralize countable nouns, and break long sentences into clearer clauses.

× Yes, when I was in school, so I learned from my teacher, we have uh, a singing class and the teacher learned me how to sing.

✓ Yes, when I was in school, I learned from my teacher; we had a singing class and the teacher taught me how to sing.

Mixed and incorrect past tense and verb choice: 'we have' should be past 'we had' to match 'when I was in school'; 'learned me' is incorrect—use 'taught me' (teacher teaches). Suggestion: maintain past tense consistently for past events and use 'teach' for the teacher's action.

× But uh, I'm not interested because it might be a big challenge for me and I cannot sing easily.

✓ But I'm not interested because it might be a big challenge for me and I cannot sing well.

Use of 'easily' is awkward when describing ability; 'sing well' or 'sing easily' depending on meaning—here 'well' is appropriate. 'Might be' is acceptable modal use. Suggestion: use 'sing well' to describe ability, and choose modals consistently.

× So at the end I disagreement with them and I don't not take classes.

✓ So in the end I disagreed with them and I did not take classes.

Incorrect noun/verb choice and double negative: 'I disagreement' should be 'I disagreed' (verb form). 'I don't not take' is a double negative; correct is 'I did not take'. Use past tense to match earlier context. Suggestion: use the verb 'disagree' in past tense and avoid double negatives.

× Who do you want to sing for? I want to sing for my parents on their anniversary but my tone and my thinking is not very capable.

✓ I want to sing for my parents on their anniversary, but my tone and my vocal ability are not very good.

Pronoun issue plus noun choice: 'my thinking is not very capable' is unnatural and unclear. Replace with 'my vocal ability' or 'my voice' and use plural verb 'are' for two items ('tone and vocal ability'). Suggestion: refer to specific qualities (tone, voice) and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× But yeah, I will try my best and sing for them as I I write a music for them and moreover they will be happy.

✓ But yeah, I will try my best and sing for them; I will write music for them, and I think they will be happy.

Incorrect tense and form: 'as I I write a music' is ungrammatical—use future 'I will write music' (no article before 'music'). Also remove duplicate 'I'. Suggestion: use 'write music' (uncountable) and keep future tense consistent when promising actions.

× Singing can bring definitely happiness to people.

✓ Singing can definitely bring happiness to people.

Word order: adverb placement is incorrect—'definitely' should be before the main verb or between auxiliary and main verb. Suggestion: place adverbs like 'definitely' before the main verb phrase.

× For example on wedding some singers sings a song and people unite and watch and more on on more work in concert people enjoy and also singing is very interested in uh people feel happiness.

✓ For example, at weddings some singers sing songs and people come together and watch; at concerts people enjoy themselves, and singing makes people feel happy.

Multiple preposition and noun errors: 'on wedding' should be 'at weddings'; 'singers sings' has subject-verb agreement error (see next) but here corrected to 'singers sing'; 'people unite and watch' is unnatural—use 'come together and watch'; 'more on on more work' is unclear; 'singing is very interested in people feel happiness' is ungrammatical—use 'singing makes people feel happy'. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('at weddings/at concerts'), pluralize where needed, and use clear verbs like 'come together' and 'make someone feel'.

× For example on wedding some singers sings a song and people unite and watch and more on on more work in concert people enjoy and also singing is very interested in uh people feel happiness.

✓ For example, at weddings some singers sing songs and people come together and watch; at concerts people enjoy themselves, and singing makes people feel happy.

Subject-verb agreement: 'singers sings' should be 'singers sing' because plural subject requires base verb. Also ensured verbs agree with subjects elsewhere. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs (no -s on verb for plural subjects).