Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is good but you need to correct grammar mistakes and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'it makes other people feel happy' instead of 'how it make other people feel'. Also, replace 'a human' with 'someone' or 'a person'. Try to make your sentences clearer and more natural.

Example: Yes, I am passionate about singing because it makes other people feel happy. For instance, when I sang in church, someone was very emotional. It was an amazing experience, so I really love singing.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but you can improve by using better linking words and more precise vocabulary. Instead of 'hold your tongue', you can say 'control your tongue'. Also, avoid repeating 'how to sing' twice. Use linking words like 'for example' properly to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I learnt how to sing while growing up in our local church. For example, the youth choir trained us on singing techniques and how to control our tongue properly. So, I gained valuable singing skills there.

Suggestion: Good answer with clear reasons. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words. For example, instead of repeating 'local church', you can say 'my community church'. Also, use 'because' and 'for example' to link ideas smoothly.

Example: I would like to sing for my community church because that is where I learnt valuable singing techniques. For example, I developed my voice control and breath control there. Therefore, I would really love for them to hear me sing.

Suggestion: Your answer has good content but contains grammar errors and incomplete sentences. 'Singling' should be 'singing'. Also, the last sentence is incomplete and unclear. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly.

Example: I strongly believe singing can bring happiness to people because I have seen firsthand how it affects them. For example, the first time I sang in church, someone became very emotional. It touched many people's hearts.

× Yes, I'm passionate about singing because of how it make other people feel.

✓ Yes, I'm passionate about singing because of how it makes other people feel.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. In English, when the subject is third person singular, the verb usually takes an 's' at the end in the present tense.

× For instance, I sang in church and a human was so emotional.

✓ For instance, I sang in church and a person was so emotional.

The word 'human' is a noun but is rarely used to refer to a single person in everyday English. The correct word here is 'person' to refer to an individual. This is a vocabulary choice related to singular and plural usage.

× For example, in the youth choir they trained the youths on how to sing and how to hold your tongue.

✓ For example, in the youth choir they trained the youths on how to sing and how to hold their tongues.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrect here because the subject is 'they' and 'the youths', which is third person plural. The possessive pronoun should be 'their' to agree with the plural subject. This is a pronoun usage issue related to tense and agreement.

× So yes, I learned how to sing.

✓ So yes, I learnt how to sing.

Both 'learned' and 'learnt' are past tense forms of 'learn'. 'Learnt' is more commonly used in British English, which fits the context better if the speaker is from a region influenced by British English. This is a stylistic choice rather than a strict grammar error.

× For instance, it was in my local church I learnt new singing techniques, new voice control and breath control.

✓ For instance, it was in my local church I learned new singing techniques, new voice control and breath control.

Similar to the previous correction, 'learned' is the American English past tense form, while 'learnt' is British English. Consistency is important; if 'learned' is used earlier, it should be used here as well.

× So I'd really love them to hear me sing.

✓ So I'd really love for them to hear me sing.

The phrase 'love them to hear me sing' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'love for them to hear me sing' to indicate the desire that 'they' hear the singing. This is a prepositional phrase issue involving pronouns.

× I strongly believe singling could bring happiness to other people because I have seen first hand how singing makes people feel.

✓ I strongly believe singing could bring happiness to other people because I have seen firsthand how singing makes people feel.

The word 'singling' is incorrect; it should be 'singing'. Also, 'first hand' should be one word 'firsthand'. This is a vocabulary and spelling issue affecting clarity.

× For example, the first time I sang in church, someone was so emotional. He touched a lot of the emotions of a lot of.

✓ For example, the first time I sang in church, someone was so emotional. He touched a lot of emotions in many people.

The sentence 'He touched a lot of the emotions of a lot of.' is incomplete and unclear. It should be restructured to clearly express that the person affected many people's emotions. This is a sentence structure and clarity issue.