Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally relevant but could be clearer and more natural. Avoid vague phrases like "a set of societies" which is unclear. Try to directly express your feelings about singing and provide specific reasons or experiences. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy singing because I have participated in many competitions since I was a child and won several prizes. Moreover, singing helps me connect with others who share the same passion for music.

Suggestion: Your answer needs clearer structure and vocabulary. Use correct terms like "orchestra player" and avoid mistakes such as "simulate her seeing skills" which is unclear. Also, try to expand your answer slightly with linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I have learned to sing from my mother, who is an orchestra player. When I was young, I loved to imitate her singing techniques to improve my skills.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use natural expressions like "support me" instead of "support me at my back" and avoid repetition. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

Example: I want to sing for my parents because they have always supported me, both emotionally and financially. Singing for them would be my way of showing gratitude for everything they have done.

Suggestion: Your answer has good intent but contains several language errors and unclear phrases such as "leave them off the steam". Use correct idioms like "let off steam" and improve sentence structure. Also, provide specific examples and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

Example: Absolutely, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to let off steam and enjoy different rhythms and styles of music, such as rock or pop.

× I participated in many competitions and gained a lot of prizes from that.

✓ I participated in many competitions and gained many prizes from that.

The quantifier 'a lot of' is generally used with uncountable nouns or plural countable nouns, but 'prizes' is countable and plural, so 'many' is more appropriate here to indicate a large number of countable items.

× I think music can bring me a set of societies.

✓ I think music can bring me a sense of community.

The phrase 'a set of societies' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is likely that music brings a feeling of belonging or community. Therefore, 'a sense of community' is the correct expression.

× She's a orchestra player and when I was young I love to simulate her seeing skills.

✓ She's an orchestra player and when I was young I loved to imitate her singing skills.

First, 'a orchestra' should be 'an orchestra' because 'orchestra' starts with a vowel sound. Second, 'love' should be in the past tense 'loved' to match 'when I was young'. Third, 'simulate' is not the correct verb here; 'imitate' is appropriate for copying someone's skills. Finally, 'seeing skills' is incorrect; it should be 'singing skills'.

× I think they often support me at my back and often give me support on financial needs, so I think I want to thank for them to thank.

✓ I think they often support me at my back and often give me support with financial needs, so I want to thank them.

The phrase 'support me at my back' is a literal translation and should be 'support me from behind' or simply 'support me'. Also, 'support on financial needs' should be 'support with financial needs'. The phrase 'thank for them to thank' is incorrect; it should be 'thank them'.

× I want to thank for them to thank.

✓ I want to thank them.

The phrase 'thank for them to thank' is grammatically incorrect. The correct form is 'thank them' without any preposition or additional verb.

× I want to sing for my parents because I think they often support me at my back and often give me support on financial needs, so I think I want to thank for them to thank.

✓ I want to sing for my parents because I think they often support me and often give me support with financial needs, so I want to thank them.

The pronoun usage is confusing and redundant. 'Thank for them to thank' is incorrect. The correct pronoun object is 'them' after 'thank'. Also, 'support me at my back' is not idiomatic; it should be 'support me' or 'support me from behind'.

× Yes, I have learned how to sing from my mother. She's a orchestra player and when I was young I love to simulate her seeing skills. Yes.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing from my mother. She's an orchestra player and when I was young I loved to imitate her singing skills.

The pronoun 'she' is correct, but the article before 'orchestra' should be 'an' not 'a'. Also, 'simulate her seeing skills' is incorrect; it should be 'imitate her singing skills'.

× I think they often support me at my back and often give me support on financial needs, so I think I want to thank for them to thank.

✓ I think they often support me and often give me support with financial needs, so I want to thank them.

The phrase 'support me at my back' is not idiomatic English; it should be 'support me'. Also, 'support on financial needs' should be 'support with financial needs'. The phrase 'thank for them to thank' is incorrect; it should be 'thank them'.

× I think seeing is a way that people can leave them off the steam and also they can enjoy the rhythm in the songs in different types of sounds, like rock music.

✓ I think singing is a way that people can let off steam and also enjoy the rhythm in songs with different types of sounds, like rock music.

The word 'seeing' is a typo and should be 'singing'. The phrase 'leave them off the steam' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'let off steam'. Also, 'enjoy the rhythm in the songs in different types of sounds' is awkward; it should be 'enjoy the rhythm in songs with different types of sounds'.