Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi lặp từ và ngữ pháp, ví dụ như "at at it" và "my my room". Bạn nên chú ý tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể sử dụng các từ vựng phong phú hơn để diễn đạt cảm xúc của mình một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a stressful day. Although I'm not very skilled, I often sing in my room as a way to express my feelings and boost my mood.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng, ví dụ như "a idol keeper", "what I just think have been fun and regarding experience so far". Bạn nên luyện tập cách sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Hãy cố gắng sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Example: Yes, I started learning to sing about three months ago because I dream of becoming a K-pop idol. I believe everyone has their own dreams, and for me, singing is a way to express myself and work towards my goals. So far, it has been a fun and rewarding experience.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng từ vựng chính xác hơn, ví dụ "adult K Pop Idol" nên là "a K-pop idol". Ngoài ra, bạn có thể thêm các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

Example: As I mentioned, I want to become a K-pop idol and sing for people all around the world. Although my voice isn't very sweet yet and I sometimes feel shy performing in front of an audience, I am working hard to improve and build my confidence.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp số nhiều và số ít, ví dụ "music have to" nên là "music helps to" hoặc "music can". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể rõ ràng hơn nếu bạn sử dụng các liên từ và từ vựng phù hợp để diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách tự nhiên và mạch lạc.

Example: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because music helps relieve stress and improve our mood. Singing allows people to express their emotions and feel more connected to others. For example, when I sing with my friends, it always makes me feel joyful and relaxed.

× Yes, I really enjoy singing because it's helped me relate after a stressful day.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a stressful day.

The phrase 'it's helped me relate' is incorrect because 'relate' is not the intended verb here. The correct verb is 'relax' to express relief from stress. Also, 'it's helped' (present perfect) is less appropriate than simple present 'it helps' to describe a habitual action.

× Although I'm not good at at it, I often sing at home at my my room and singing is a great way for me to express my emotion and feel happier.

✓ Although I'm not good at it, I often sing at home in my room, and singing is a great way for me to express my emotions and feel happier.

The phrase 'good at at it' contains a repeated preposition 'at'. Also, 'at my my room' should be 'in my room' because 'in' is the correct preposition for enclosed spaces. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context.

× Yes, I learned how to sing about three months ago because I have a dream of becoming a idol keeper and I believe everyone has their own their own dreams.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing about three months ago because I have a dream of becoming an idol keeper, and I believe everyone has their own dreams.

The article before 'idol keeper' should be 'an' because 'idol' starts with a vowel sound. The phrase 'their own their own dreams' repeats 'their own' unnecessarily. The past tense 'learned' is correct here.

× And for me singing is a way to express myself and achieve my goals, what I just think have been fun and regarding experience so far.

✓ For me, singing is a way to express myself and achieve my goals. I think it has been a fun and rewarding experience so far.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'What I just think have been fun and regarding experience' is incorrect. It should be split into two sentences with proper subject-verb agreement and word choice: 'I think it has been a fun and rewarding experience'.

× As I mentioned before, I want to become a adult K Pop Idol, so I hope to sing for everyone all around the world.

✓ As I mentioned before, I want to become an adult K-Pop idol, so I hope to sing for everyone all around the world.

The article before 'adult' should be 'an' because 'adult' starts with a vowel sound. 'K Pop Idol' should be hyphenated as 'K-Pop idol' and 'idol' should be lowercase unless part of a title.

× However, my voice is not very sweet yet, and I sometimes feel a little shy when I perform in front of the audience.

✓ However, my voice is not very sweet yet, and I sometimes feel a little shy when I perform in front of an audience.

'The audience' implies a specific audience known to both speaker and listener. If referring to any audience in general, 'an audience' is more appropriate.

× Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music have to relieve stress and improve our mood.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music has to relieve stress and improve our mood.

The subject 'music' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have' to agree in number.

× Singing as part of music allow people to express their emotion and feel more connect to other.

✓ Singing as part of music allows people to express their emotions and feel more connected to others.

The verb should be 'allows' to agree with singular subject 'singing'. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. 'Connect' should be 'connected' (adjective form). 'Other' should be 'others' to refer to other people.

× For example, when I sing with my friends, it's always make me feel joyful and relaxed.

✓ For example, when I sing with my friends, it always makes me feel joyful and relaxed.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' instead of 'make' to agree in number.