Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 'tone deaf'라는 표현이 조금 부정적으로 들릴 수 있으므로 좀 더 긍정적인 표현을 사용하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 연결어를 조금 더 활용하여 문장 간 흐름을 부드럽게 만들면 좋겠습니다.

Example: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Even though I'm not a professional singer, I love singing my favorite ballads, which always make me feel calm and happy. Moreover, singing with my friends at karaoke is a great way to bond and share our passion for music.

Suggestion: 답변이 명확하지만, 'high pitched tones' 대신 'high-pitched notes'와 같은 더 자연스러운 표현을 사용하는 것이 좋습니다. 또한, 문장 연결을 위해 'for instance'나 'such as' 같은 연결어를 활용하면 더 자연스러운 흐름이 됩니다.

Example: No, I haven't taken formal singing lessons, but I try to improve by singing along to various songs. Since many of my friends enjoy singing, it's a fun hobby that helps me relax and connect with them. For instance, I often practice Korean ballads because they include challenging high-pitched notes.

Suggestion: 답변이 구체적이고 자연스럽지만, 'wanna' 대신 'want to'를 사용하는 것이 더 공식적이고 적절합니다. 또한, 문장 간 연결어를 조금 더 활용하면 좋겠습니다.

Example: I would like to sing for my friends and family because sharing music with loved ones is very enjoyable. Singing at gatherings always lifts the atmosphere and makes everyone happy. For example, I want to sing a song called 'Champion' for my family someday to cheer them up, as they are my biggest supporters.

Suggestion: 답변이 긍정적이고 구체적이지만, 'therapeutic'이라는 단어 사용이 약간 어색할 수 있습니다. 대신 'relaxing'이나 'comforting' 같은 단어를 사용하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장 연결어를 활용해 문장들을 더 매끄럽게 연결하면 좋겠습니다.

Example: Yes, definitely. Singing can make people feel more energetic and relaxed. For instance, I often hum or sing to myself when I'm alone, such as when I'm taking a shower, cooking, or cleaning.

× For example, I often practice Korean ballads because they challenge high pitched tones.

✓ For example, I often practice Korean ballads because they challenge high-pitched tones.

The phrase 'high pitched tones' requires a hyphen to correctly form the compound adjective 'high-pitched' modifying 'tones'. Without the hyphen, it can cause confusion about the relationship between the words. Hyphenating compound adjectives before nouns is a standard English grammar rule.

× Someday I wanna sing a song named Champion for my family to cheer them up since they are my biggest supporters.

✓ Someday I want to sing a song named 'Champion' for my family to cheer them up since they are my biggest supporters.

The word 'wanna' is informal and should be replaced with the correct form 'want to' in formal or semi-formal speech or writing. Also, the song title 'Champion' should be enclosed in quotation marks to indicate it is a title. This improves clarity and correctness.

× For example when I do something like taking a shower, cooking in the kitchen and cleaning.

✓ For example, when I do something like take a shower, cook in the kitchen, and clean.

After 'do something like', the base form of the verb should be used, not the gerund (-ing form). Therefore, 'taking' should be 'take', 'cooking' should be 'cook', and 'cleaning' should be 'clean'. Also, commas are added for clarity in the list.