Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more concise and clear by avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific examples to support your points.

Example: Yes, I enjoy singing because it uplifts my mood and helps me bond with my daughter, who learns best through songs.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about your singing experience.

Example: Yes, I learned to sing in primary school when my music teacher selected me to perform songs during school events.

Suggestion: Clarify your answer by organizing your ideas logically and using appropriate linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and provide specific reasons.

Example: I would like Elizabeth to sing for my daughter because she loves nursery rhymes, and singing helps her learn and remember information better.

Suggestion: Make your answer more natural by using simpler and clearer language. Use linking words to explain your reasons and provide specific examples.

Example: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because music acts like therapy, helping people feel relaxed and calm.

× I like singing because it creates a positive environment inside my soul and it helps me feel better as well as it makes me attach well with my daughter who prefers to learn with singing.

✓ I like singing because it creates a positive environment inside my soul and it helps me feel better as well as helps me connect well with my daughter who prefers to learn through singing.

The phrase 'makes me attach well with my daughter' is incorrect. The verb 'attach' is not used reflexively here. Instead, 'helps me connect well with my daughter' is more appropriate. Also, 'learn with singing' should be 'learn through singing' to correctly express the method of learning.

× Yes, when I was at the primary school, my music teacher selected me to sing songs. I did performance at primary school with songs.

✓ Yes, when I was at primary school, my music teacher selected me to sing songs. I performed at primary school with songs.

The phrase 'I did performance' is incorrect; the correct past tense verb is 'performed'. Also, 'at the primary school' should be 'at primary school' as 'primary school' is used in a general sense here.

× I would love Elizabeth to sing for my daughter who is extremely in love with nursery rhymes. She likes to learn by singing her brain connect information but better we sing to her.

✓ I would love Elizabeth to sing for my daughter who is extremely fond of nursery rhymes. She likes to learn by singing because it helps her brain connect information better, so it is better if we sing to her.

The phrase 'extremely in love with' is inappropriate for nursery rhymes; 'extremely fond of' is better. 'By singing her brain connect information' is ungrammatical; it should be 'by singing because it helps her brain connect information'. Also, 'better we sing to her' is awkward; 'so it is better if we sing to her' is clearer.

× Of course it does, because recently singing and music was considered sort of a therapy for a human body because it can make people feel relaxed and calm.

✓ Of course it does, because recently singing and music have been considered a sort of therapy for the human body as they can make people feel relaxed and calm.

The sentence uses 'was considered' which is past tense, but 'recently' suggests present perfect 'have been considered'. Also, 'a therapy' is better than 'sort of a therapy'. 'A human body' should be 'the human body'. 'It can make' should be 'they can make' to agree with plural subject 'singing and music'.