Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be careful with pronunciation and word choice, for example, 'sinning' should be 'singing'. Also, try to avoid redundancy and keep answers concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific examples to enrich your answer.

Example: Yes, singing has been my favourite hobby since childhood because it helps me relax and express my emotions creatively. For example, I enjoy singing pop and rap songs as they allow me to connect with different feelings.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. Provide more specific details about your training and how it helped you.

Example: Yes, I have. I received professional singing training during grades five and six because I wanted to improve my vocal skills. This training helped me develop a stronger voice, which boosts my confidence when performing with friends.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence flow. Use linking words such as 'however' and 'for example' appropriately. Be more specific about why you prefer singing for these groups.

Example: I prefer to sing for my friends and family because I feel more comfortable around them. For example, during small gatherings, I enjoy performing songs with my close friends despite being shy in public.

Suggestion: Correct pronunciation errors such as 'Sydney' to 'singing'. Avoid filler words like 'umm'. Use clearer sentence structures and linking words to explain your ideas logically. Provide specific examples of how singing affects emotions.

Example: Definitely. Singing is a relaxing and expressive way to convey emotions like sadness or happiness. For instance, upbeat songs with meaningful lyrics can energize listeners and make their hearts race with excitement.

× Yes, sinning has been my longest hobby ever since I was a child.

✓ Yes, singing has been my longest hobby ever since I was a child.

The word 'sinning' is a present participle form of the verb 'sin', which means to commit a moral wrong. The intended word is 'singing', which refers to the act of producing musical sounds with the voice. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar error, but correcting it is essential for clarity.

× I trained professionally during six and five grades.

✓ I trained professionally during fifth and sixth grades.

The phrase 'six and five grades' is incorrect in English. The correct ordinal forms are 'fifth and sixth grades'. Also, the order should be from lower to higher grade for clarity. This is a past tense context, so 'trained' is correct, but the grade description needs correction.

× And it's come becoming my strong point when I'm singing with my friend and performing with them.

✓ And it has become my strong point when I'm singing with my friends and performing with them.

The phrase 'it's come becoming' is incorrect. The correct form is 'it has become'. Also, 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the context of performing with multiple people. 'Become' is the past participle used with 'has' to form the present perfect tense.

× I'm thinking of two groups of people considering who would I love to sing for? 1st is my friend and 2nd is my family.

✓ I'm thinking of two groups of people when considering who I would love to sing for: first, my friends and second, my family.

The original sentence has incorrect word order in the question embedded in the statement and uses singular 'friend' instead of plural 'friends'. Also, '1st' and '2nd' should be written as 'first' and 'second' in formal speech. The corrected sentence improves clarity and grammar.

× And yeah, sometimes I would sing a vocal with them together.

✓ And yeah, sometimes I would sing vocals with them together.

The phrase 'sing a vocal' is incorrect; 'vocal' is usually uncountable or pluralized as 'vocals' when referring to singing parts. Also, 'with them together' is redundant; 'with them' suffices. The correction improves naturalness and grammatical correctness.

× Definitely because Sydney itself is such a relaxing and really abstract way, I would say to express various emotions, sadness, happiness, umm.

✓ Definitely because singing itself is such a relaxing and really abstract way, I would say, to express various emotions, sadness, happiness, umm.

'Sydney' is a proper noun referring to a city and is incorrect here. The intended word is 'singing'. This is a vocabulary error but affects the sentence meaning. Also, adding commas improves readability.

× And also when the lyrics are light and meaningful and the rhythm is also quite fast, it's hard to bring your blood like flow faster and let your heart be race.

✓ And also when the lyrics are light and meaningful and the rhythm is quite fast, it helps to make your blood flow faster and lets your heart race.

The phrase 'bring your blood like flow faster' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make your blood flow faster'. Also, 'let your heart be race' is incorrect; it should be 'lets your heart race'. These corrections fix preposition and verb usage errors for natural expression.