Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit incomplete and slightly unclear at the end. Try to complete your thoughts fully and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, explain why jazz music is preferable to sad music. Keep your answer natural and concise within 5 sentences.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and feel peaceful after a busy day. I usually sing jazz songs rather than sad ones because jazz has a lively rhythm that uplifts my mood. Moreover, singing daily has become a great way for me to relieve stress and express my emotions.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally good but can be improved by using linking words to make it more coherent. Also, correct minor grammatical errors like 'in my 6th grade' to 'in the 6th grade' and 'many competition' to 'many competitions'. Adding a concluding sentence about how this learning helped you would enrich your response.

Example: Yes, I started learning how to sing when I was in the 6th grade. There was a singing class a few kilometers from my house, where I learned classical music to strengthen my vocal cords. Additionally, I participated in many competitions, which helped me gain confidence and improve my skills.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit wordy and some phrases like 'make them feel enlightened' are unusual in this context. Try to use simpler and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Keep your answer natural and concise.

Example: I want to sing for my friends because they mean a lot to me. Singing for them helps me express my feelings and strengthens our friendship. I enjoy sharing music with them as it brings us closer together.

Suggestion: Your answer has good ideas but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using more precise vocabulary. Also, try to link your sentences smoothly and avoid mixing metaphors. For example, choose either 'heaven' or 'medicine' metaphor and explain it clearly.

Example: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to many people. Personally, singing feels like a healing medicine that helps me overcome difficult emotions. It is a beautiful form of art that can uplift spirits and bring joy to both the singer and the listeners.

× I prefer jazz music over sad music as it is more.

✓ I prefer jazz music over sad music as it is more uplifting.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'more' which is incomplete and unclear. A quantifier or adjective is needed to complete the comparison. Adding 'uplifting' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence.

× There was a singing class right few kilometers from my house.

✓ There was a singing class just a few kilometers from my house.

The phrase 'right few kilometers' is incorrect. The correct preposition and quantifier is 'just a few kilometers' to indicate proximity.

× I used to learn classical music to strengthen my vocal cords and also participated in many competition.

✓ I used to learn classical music to strengthen my vocal cords and also participated in many competitions.

The word 'competition' should be plural 'competitions' because it refers to multiple events.

× I always wanted to sing for my friends because my friends were the best and I thought that singing a song for them would make them feel enlightened and deepen our bond with me, so I loved singing.

✓ I always wanted to sing for my friends because they were the best and I thought that singing a song for them would make them feel enlightened and deepen our bond, so I loved singing.

The phrase 'deepen our bond with me' is incorrect. The pronoun 'me' is unnecessary and incorrect here. The correct phrase is 'deepen our bond'.