Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but contains some language errors and redundancy. Try to use correct vocabulary ('singing' instead of 'seeing'), avoid repeating the same word unnecessarily, and keep your answer concise and natural. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax when I'm stressed. Moreover, it brings happiness and allows me to connect with others who share the same interest. Additionally, singing is a valuable skill that boosts my confidence.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and structured but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use past tense consistently and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, add linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I have learnt how to sing twice. The first time was in kindergarten because my mum thought it would help build my confidence, and I learnt simple songs then. Later, in high school, I joined the chorus and practised singing every day.

Suggestion: Your answer is heartfelt and detailed, but some sentences are long and slightly unclear. Try to break complex ideas into shorter sentences and use linking words to improve clarity and flow. Also, watch verb tenses for consistency.

Example: I would like to sing for my grandma, who passed away from brain cancer two years ago before I achieved much. I want to express my gratitude and deep love for her through my songs.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use singular/plural forms correctly and avoid informal expressions like 'So yeah'. Use linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly.

Example: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because humans have a strong connection with music. Music inspires creativity, and people often feel happier when they listen to or sing songs. Therefore, singing is a wonderful way to improve mood.

× Secondly, seeing can bring people happiness and help them find people with the same interest.

✓ Secondly, singing can bring people happiness and help them find people with the same interests.

The word 'seeing' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'singing'. Also, 'interest' should be plural 'interests' because it refers to multiple people's interests.

× Thirdly, seeing is a great skill to learn and cultivating confidence.

✓ Thirdly, singing is a great skill to learn and cultivates confidence.

Again, 'seeing' should be 'singing'. Also, the phrase 'and cultivating confidence' is incorrect; it should be 'and cultivates confidence' to maintain parallel structure and correct verb form.

× Yes, I learned how to sing twice.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing twice.

Since the action relates to life experience up to now, the present perfect tense 'have learned' is more appropriate than simple past 'learned'.

× The first time was in kindergarten, My mom thought it was a good way to cultivate my confidence and I learned how to sing simple songs on.

✓ The first time was in kindergarten. My mom thought it was a good way to cultivate my confidence, and I learned how to sing simple songs then.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence and lacks clarity. It should be split into two sentences, and 'on' at the end is incorrect; 'then' is the correct word to indicate time.

× The second time was in high school, I joined the chorus, so I learned to sing every day.

✓ The second time was in high school. I joined the chorus, so I learned to sing every day.

The original sentence is a comma splice; it should be separated into two sentences for clarity and correctness.

× I really want to sing for my grandma who passed away due to a serious brain cancer two years ago and before I made any achievements she left me.

✓ I really want to sing for my grandma who passed away from a serious brain cancer two years ago, and she left me before I made any achievements.

The preposition 'due to' is better replaced with 'from' when referring to cause of death. Also, the sentence structure is improved by reordering the clauses for clarity.

× So I really wanted to sing in front of her to express how thankful and grateful I am to her and I want to show my deep love to her through my songs.

✓ So I really want to sing in front of her to express how thankful and grateful I am to her, and I want to show my deep love for her through my songs.

The tense should be present 'want' to match the ongoing desire. Also, 'love to her' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'love for her'.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because human beings have a strong bond with music and music is one of the greatest way to cultivate inspiration and creation.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because human beings have a strong bond with music, and music is one of the greatest ways to cultivate inspiration and creativity.

'One of the greatest way' should be 'one of the greatest ways' to agree in number. Also, 'creation' is better replaced with 'creativity' in this context.

× And during the process, people can definitely feel happier when listening to songs or when they are singing.

✓ And during the process, people can definitely feel happier when listening to songs or when they are singing.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct.

× So yeah, I think it's good way.

✓ So yeah, I think it's a good way.

The phrase 'good way' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.