Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific reasons or examples. Avoid unfinished sentences and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Moreover, my grandmother is a singer, so I have inherited a good voice from her, which motivates me to sing more.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating words. Provide more specific details about what you learned and how it helped you.

Example: Yes, I have. I watched several YouTube videos that teach how to improve vocal techniques and pitch notes accurately. These videos have helped me to sing better and gain confidence.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but can be improved by using better linking words and more natural expressions. Avoid awkward phrases like 'second of all' and 'big audience of big people'. Be more specific about your feelings and reasons.

Example: First of all, I want to sing for my family because they are very important to me, and I enjoy making them happy. Secondly, I hope to perform in front of a large audience who will appreciate my singing, which will be a great experience for me.

Suggestion: Your answer has good ideas but contains some unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Use clearer vocabulary and correct expressions. For example, replace 'affluent' with 'influence' and clarify your points with linking words.

Example: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because many people express their emotions through music. Moreover, singing cheerful songs can positively influence people's moods and make them feel happier.

× For example, singing helps me to. My.

✓ For example, singing helps me.

The original sentence is incomplete and fragmented, which causes confusion. The phrase 'helps me to' requires an object or verb to complete the meaning. Removing the incomplete fragment 'My.' and completing the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I've watched some particular videos on YouTube about about how to improve your voice or how to pitch that note and this and some other videos like this and it helps me.

✓ I've watched some particular videos on YouTube about how to improve your voice or how to pitch a note, and some other videos like these, and they help me.

The sentence contains repeated words ('about about'), incorrect article usage ('that note' should be 'a note'), and awkward phrasing ('this and some other videos like this'). Also, 'it helps me' should be 'they help me' to agree with plural 'videos'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× First of all, I want to sing for my family because they are the closest for me and I want to make them happy by singing.

✓ First of all, I want to sing for my family because they are the closest to me, and I want to make them happy by singing.

The phrase 'closest for me' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to' in this context. Changing 'for' to 'to' corrects the prepositional error.

× And the second of all, it's as our audience.

✓ And secondly, it's for our audience.

The phrase 'second of all' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'secondly'. Also, 'it's as our audience' is unclear and ungrammatical; replacing it with 'it's for our audience' clarifies the meaning.

× I want to sing in front of a big audience of big people or a crowd that will enjoy it, I will enjoy.

✓ I want to sing in front of a large audience or a crowd that will enjoy it, and I will enjoy it too.

The phrase 'a big audience of big people' is redundant and awkward. 'Large audience' is more appropriate. Also, the sentence is a run-on; adding 'and' and repeating 'it' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× Yes, I think so because through thinking many people express their emotions and it goes without saying that music can affluent in people's mood and people can get happier when they sing happier songs.

✓ Yes, I think so because through singing many people express their emotions, and it goes without saying that music can influence people's mood, and people can get happier when they sing happy songs.

The phrase 'through thinking' is incorrect; it should be 'through singing' to match context. 'Music can affluent in people's mood' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'influence'. Also, 'happier songs' should be 'happy songs' to correctly describe the songs' mood.