Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như cách dùng từ chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, chính xác và tự nhiên hơn.

Example: No, I don't really like singing because I feel shy and think I don't sing well. So, I rarely sing in front of others.

Suggestion: Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đơn cho hành động đã xảy ra trong quá khứ và tránh dùng các cụm từ không tự nhiên như "as my memory served me right". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và có liên kết mạch lạc.

Example: Yes, when I was about eight or nine years old, I learned singing in my music class. It helped me improve my skills a lot.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý đến ngữ pháp, ví dụ như chia động từ cho đúng và tránh lặp từ. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có liên kết giữa các ý.

Example: I would definitely sing for my family because they are very important to me. They have always supported and motivated me during difficult times.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý đến số nhiều và số ít của động từ (singing does, singing plays). Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh dùng các cụm từ không tự nhiên như "promote our ambition and dream to career path". Hãy dùng từ vựng phù hợp và câu đơn giản, dễ hiểu.

Example: Yes, I think singing brings happiness because it helps people relax and feel better. It can also inspire us to follow our dreams and goals.

× I rarely sing a song for myself since I realized that I don't have ability to sing and I feel shy and embarrassing singing in front of other people.

✓ I rarely sing a song for myself since I realized that I don't have the ability to sing and I feel shy and embarrassed singing in front of other people.

The word 'embarrassing' is an adjective describing something that causes embarrassment, but here the student wants to describe their own feeling, so the correct adjective is 'embarrassed'. Also, 'ability' needs the definite article 'the' before it.

× As my memory served me right in the age of eight or nine years old, we have a subject called music and we have to learn to sing.

✓ As my memory serves me right, at the age of eight or nine years old, we had a subject called music and we had to learn to sing.

The phrase 'my memory served me right' should be in present tense 'serves' because the memory is currently serving. Also, the time reference is past, so 'have' should be 'had' to match past tense. 'At the age of' is the correct preposition.

× It helped me a lot and broaden my skills.

✓ It helped me a lot and broadened my skills.

The verb 'broaden' should be in past tense 'broadened' to agree with 'helped' and the past context.

× Well definitely I would sing for my family since it is where my heart located and they always supported me through difficulty, difficult times and motivate me to be a better person.

✓ Well definitely I would sing for my family since it is where my heart is located and they have always supported me through difficulties, difficult times and motivated me to be a better person.

The phrase 'my heart located' is missing the verb 'is'. Also, 'supported' and 'motivate' should be parallel in past tense 'supported' and 'motivated'. 'Difficulty' should be plural 'difficulties' to match 'times'.

× I must say that singing do bring happiness to people.

✓ I must say that singing does bring happiness to people.

The subject 'singing' is singular, so the verb should be 'does' instead of 'do' to agree in number.

× Singing play a crucial part in our lives and can have us unwind and recharge our batteries.

✓ Singing plays a crucial part in our lives and can help us unwind and recharge our batteries.

The singular subject 'Singing' requires the verb 'plays' with an 's'. Also, 'can have us unwind' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'can help us unwind'.

× Also it can promote our ambition and dream to career path.

✓ Also it can promote our ambition and dreams towards our career path.

The phrase 'dream to career path' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'towards' and 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' to match 'ambition'.