Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, bạn có thể thêm các chi tiết cụ thể hơn về loại nhạc bạn thích hoặc cảm xúc khi hát.

Example: Yes, I love singing because it has been a part of my life since childhood. My family always plays music at home, which inspired me to sing along and enjoy different genres, especially pop and classical music.

Suggestion: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ cho chính xác hơn, ví dụ 'I have been on a training' nên sửa thành 'I have been training'. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn và tránh lặp từ.

Example: Yes, I have been taking singing lessons for several years because I aspire to become a professional singer. After graduating from high school, I plan to apply to a music university to further develop my skills.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời hơi dài và có phần lặp ý. Bạn nên chia câu thành các phần rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, tránh dùng những từ như 'very special voice' mà nên dùng từ ngữ cụ thể hơn để mô tả giọng hát của bạn.

Example: I want to sing for everyone because music is a universal language. I hope to share my passion and unique vocal style with people worldwide, so they can enjoy and connect with my performances.

Suggestion: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và nói rõ ràng hơn. Câu cuối cùng 'and it's really helped me heal. Heal.' có phần thừa từ. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm ví dụ cụ thể hơn để tăng tính thuyết phục.

Example: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it uplifts the mood. For instance, when I feel sad, I listen to cheerful songs and sing along, which helps me feel better and more positive.

× I think I was affected by my family tradition for enjoying music.

✓ I think I was affected by my family tradition of enjoying music.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to express the cause or basis of the tradition is 'of'. So, 'tradition of enjoying music' is the proper phrase.

× They always make sure that music is turned on in my house and I just listen to it and sing with it.

✓ They always make sure that music is turned on in my house and I just listen to it and sing along with it.

The phrase 'sing with it' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'sing along with it' when referring to singing together with music.

× I have been on a training for a very long time and once I graduate high school, I'll be applying in a musical university.

✓ I have been in training for a very long time and once I graduate from high school, I'll be applying to a music university.

The phrase 'been on a training' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'been in training'. Also, 'graduate high school' needs the preposition 'from'. Finally, 'applying in a musical university' should be 'applying to a music university'.

× I want to show my talent, my passion for music to the whole world and I have a very special voice, so I think I'll make them love me from the first hearing.

✓ I want to show my talent, my passion for music to the whole world and I have a very special voice, so I think I'll make them love me from the first hearing.

No correction needed for prepositions in this sentence.

× Like, for example, when I'm sad, I turn on happy music and dance to it, sing to it, and it's really helped me heal.

✓ Like, for example, when I'm sad, I turn on happy music and dance to it, sing to it, and it really helps me heal.

The phrase 'it's really helped me heal' mixes present and past tense incorrectly. Since the context is habitual action, present tense 'it really helps me heal' is appropriate.