Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response first, then explain with clear reasons. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences simple and coherent. Use linking words like 'but' or 'however' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I liked singing when I was a child because I enjoyed my music classes at school. However, after I completed my senior scholarship, I found singing to be time-consuming and felt my voice was not very strong, so I lost interest.

Suggestion: Your answer needs better structure and clearer expression. Start with a direct answer, then add specific details using linking words like 'and' or 'but'. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense usage.

Example: Yes, I learnt singing at school from my music teacher. It was a helpful experience, although I found it difficult to understand everything at first. Later, I also joined English singing classes to improve my skills.

Suggestion: Your answer is too long and confusing. Try to make your sentences shorter and clearer. Start with a direct answer, then explain with specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'and'.

Example: I want to sing for my mother because she is my role model. I would choose songs that express love and appreciation for her hard work throughout her life.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Use simpler sentences and correct grammar. Start with a clear opinion, then explain with reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'however'.

Example: I think singing can bring happiness to some people because they enjoy it. However, others may not find it important or enjoyable.

× As earlier when in my childhood days I was studying in school in my music classes, firstly I used like singing but after my accomplishment of senior scholarship I didn't like singing as it's a time consuming activity for me and my vocal code is no not so much effective as of singles.

✓ As earlier, when I was a child studying in school music classes, I used to like singing, but after I accomplished the senior scholarship, I didn't like singing because it was a time-consuming activity for me and my vocal cords were not as effective as those of singles.

The sentence contains incorrect past tense usage and awkward phrasing. 'Used like' should be 'used to like' to express past habitual action. 'Accomplishment' should be 'accomplished' to indicate completed action. 'It's' should be 'it was' to maintain past tense consistency. 'Vocal code' is incorrect; it should be 'vocal cords'. 'No not so much effective as of singles' is unclear and corrected to 'were not as effective as those of singles'. These corrections improve clarity and maintain proper past tense.

× Yes, when I was a kid in the school, when in our music classes, I usually learn singing from my music teacher.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid in school, during our music classes, I usually learned singing from my music teacher.

The verb 'learn' should be in past tense 'learned' to match the past time frame indicated by 'when I was a kid'. Also, 'in the school' is better as 'in school' for natural phrasing. These changes correct tense and preposition usage.

× It was an enhancing activity for me as I was a new singer.

✓ It was an enriching activity for me as I was a new singer.

While 'enhancing' is not grammatically incorrect, 'enriching' is a more appropriate adjective to describe an activity that improves skills or experience. This is a stylistic improvement rather than a strict grammar correction.

× I didn't catch each and every point of my teacher easily.

✓ I didn't catch every point my teacher made easily.

The phrase 'each and every' is redundant; 'every' suffices. Also, 'of my teacher' is better expressed as 'my teacher made' to clarify the points belong to the teacher. This improves sentence clarity and conciseness.

× After that I usually started English English singing classes.

✓ After that, I usually started English singing classes.

The repetition 'English English' is likely a typo and should be corrected to a single 'English'. The sentence is in past tense and 'usually started' is acceptable if indicating habitual past action.

× I want to sing for my mother as she is one of the role model also for me and I can suggest any song to her that is of love and affection to her and the hard work that she did for me in his life and she is continuously doing till now also and she will be doing in future also.

✓ I want to sing for my mother as she is one of my role models, and I can dedicate songs to her that express love and affection for her and the hard work she has done for me in her life. She continues to do so even now and will continue in the future as well.

The sentence has pronoun errors: 'his life' should be 'her life' to match 'mother'. 'Role model' should be plural 'role models' as 'one of the' implies multiple. 'Suggest any song to her that is of love and affection to her' is awkward and corrected to 'dedicate songs to her that express love and affection'. The tense is adjusted for clarity and correctness. These corrections fix pronoun agreement and improve sentence structure.

× It depends upon person to person prospectives as singing for some people may bring happiness if they are fond of singing, they may become more happiness happy in their life of singing.

✓ It depends on a person-to-person perspective, as singing may bring happiness to some people if they are fond of it; they may become happier in their lives through singing.

'Depends upon' is better as 'depends on'. 'Person to person prospectives' is corrected to 'person-to-person perspective' for proper idiomatic expression. 'More happiness happy' is incorrect; 'happier' is the correct comparative adjective. 'In their life of singing' is awkward and changed to 'in their lives through singing'. These corrections improve preposition use and adjective form.

× But to some people it is not a serious activity that they can do.

✓ But for some people, it is not a serious activity that they engage in.

The phrase 'that they can do' is awkward; 'that they engage in' is more natural. Also, 'to some people' is better as 'for some people' to indicate the group affected. These changes improve sentence structure and preposition use.