Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains some irrelevant or unclear parts. Try to answer directly and clearly, starting with a clear topic sentence. Avoid unrelated words like 'Sydney' which seems out of place. Use linking words to explain why you like singing and keep your answer concise and natural.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions and connect with others. Since I was a child, singing has been a way for me to cope with life's ups and downs and feel happier.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition and incomplete sentences. Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. Also, check your grammar and sentence structure for clarity.

Example: Yes, I have learnt some singing skills by watching online videos and listening to experienced singers. However, I haven't had any formal or professional training, but I enjoy singing as a hobby.

Suggestion: Your answer is heartfelt but a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain why you want to sing for your grandmother and give specific details about her and how she inspired you.

Example: If I had the chance, I would like to sing for my grandmother. She was a very strong woman who faced many difficulties in her life, but she always sang to keep her spirits up. Her resilience inspires me a lot.

Suggestion: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and use correct vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain how singing brings happiness to both the singer and others.

Example: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness not only to the person singing but also to the listeners. When someone sings with feeling, it can inspire and uplift others around them.

× Sydney is one of my favorite hobbies and since I was a little girl I sang a lot because in life there are some.

✓ Singing is one of my favorite hobbies and since I was a little girl I sang a lot because in life there are some.

The word 'Sydney' is a proper noun referring to a place and is incorrectly used here. The intended word is 'singing', which is a hobby. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar error, but it affects sentence clarity and correctness.

× Sydney is one of my favorite hobbies and since I was a little girl I sang a lot because in life there are some.

✓ Singing is one of my favorite hobbies, and since I was a little girl, I have sung a lot because life has its ups and downs.

The original sentence is confusing and incomplete ('because in life there are some' is unclear). The sentence structure needs to be improved for clarity and completeness. Adding commas and completing the thought improves readability and meaning.

× singing is a way to express ourselves and to connect with other people.

✓ Singing is a way to express myself and to connect with other people.

The student is speaking about their own experience, so the pronoun should be singular 'myself' instead of plural 'ourselves' to maintain consistency and correctness.

× I learned some skills online and by browsing the short videos and some singers experience sharing but I didn't receive any system system medical training in singing but I think it's OK because I just saying singing as one of my.

✓ I learned some skills online by browsing short videos and some singers' experience sharing, but I didn't receive any systematic professional training in singing. However, I think it's OK because I just see singing as one of my hobbies.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'system system medical training' is incorrect and likely meant 'systematic professional training'; 'just saying singing as one of my' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness. Also, possessive form 'singers'' is needed.

× I learned some skills online and by browsing the short videos and some singers experience sharing but I didn't receive any system system medical training in singing but I think it's OK because I just saying singing as one of my.

✓ I learned some skills online by browsing short videos and some singers' experience sharing, but I didn't receive any systematic professional training in singing, but I think it's OK because I just see singing as one of my hobbies.

The phrase 'by browsing the short videos and some singers experience sharing' needs the preposition 'by' before 'browsing' and possessive apostrophe in 'singers' to indicate possession. Also, 'system system medical training' is incorrect and replaced with 'systematic professional training'.

× Even though she has the lowest part of her life, she always sung this this when she did things and that spirit inspired.

✓ Even though she had the lowest part of her life, she always sang this song when she did things, and that spirit inspired me.

The sentence mixes present tense 'has' with past context; it should be past tense 'had'. The verb 'sung' is the past participle and should be 'sang' for simple past. The phrase 'this this' is unclear and likely meant 'this song'. The sentence also lacks an object for 'inspired'.

× Yes, singing can bring the happiness to the singer himself or herself.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to the singer himself or herself.

The article 'the' before 'happiness' is unnecessary because 'happiness' is an uncountable noun and generally used without 'the' in this context.

× And when you sing from museum that means you also can contingent, so it can inspire others.

✓ And when you sing from the heart, that means you can also connect, so it can inspire others.

The phrase 'sing from museum' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'sing from the heart'. The word 'contingent' is incorrect here; likely intended 'connect'. Adding 'the' before 'heart' is necessary as it is a fixed expression.