Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say "My childhood dream was to be a singer" instead of "dreams was to be an idol or a singer". Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

Example: I love singing because my childhood dream was to be a singer and perform on stage wearing beautiful outfits.

Suggestion: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, "My mom found out I had talent, so she enrolled me in a singing class, but I was too shy and refused to attend."

Example: My mom discovered I had talent for singing, so she enrolled me in a class. However, I was too shy and refused to go.

Suggestion: Use clearer and more natural expressions. Avoid awkward phrases like "appreciates your behavior" and improve grammar. For example, "I prefer to sing for myself because not everyone appreciates my singing, so I sing to motivate myself."

Example: I prefer to sing for myself because not everyone appreciates my singing. Singing helps me stay motivated and confident.

Suggestion: Try to use more natural phrases and avoid repetition. For example, say "It depends on the situation" instead of "depends on the occasions". Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: I think singing can bring happiness depending on the situation. For example, when I'm feeling sad, I prefer to sing sad songs rather than happy ones.

× I love to sing because my childhood dreams was to be an idol or a singer so that I can show up on the stage with all the gorgeous outfits.

✓ I love to sing because my childhood dreams were to be an idol or a singer so that I can show up on the stage with all the gorgeous outfits.

The subject 'dreams' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' instead of 'was' to agree in past tense. This is a subject-verb agreement issue in the past tense.

× I have never learned how to sing properly because when I was in primary my mom actually found out that I actually have the Tal talent to singing so she decided to put me in this one same class but I was too shy to be there.

✓ I have never learned how to sing properly because when I was in primary school my mom actually found out that I actually have the talent for singing so she decided to put me in this one same class but I was too shy to be there.

The phrase 'talent to singing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'talent for singing' because 'talent' is followed by 'for' plus the gerund form of the verb. Also, 'primary' should be 'primary school' for clarity.

× So I reject my mom and I refuse to go.

✓ So I rejected my mom and I refused to go.

The actions happened in the past, so the verbs should be in the past tense 'rejected' and 'refused' to maintain tense consistency.

× I would just wanted to sing for myself because you know not everyone appreciates your behavior.

✓ I would just want to sing for myself because you know not everyone appreciates your behavior.

After 'would', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'wanted' should be 'want'. 'Would want' is the correct modal verb construction.

× So instead of working hard for the others trying to show how good are you to the others, I decided to just show it or just keep it to myself in order to motivate myself and avoid hearing all the things that I don't want to hear.

✓ So instead of working hard for others and trying to show how good you are to them, I decided to just show it or keep it to myself in order to motivate myself and avoid hearing all the things that I don't want to hear.

The original sentence has awkward structure and incorrect word order in 'how good are you to the others'. It should be 'how good you are to them' to follow correct English word order and pronoun use.

× I mostly sing sad songs. I don't have the mood to sing any song that is that brought happiness because I'm just not in the mood.

✓ I mostly sing sad songs. I don't have the mood to sing any song that brings happiness because I'm just not in the mood.

The phrase 'that is that brought happiness' is incorrect. It should be 'that brings happiness' to indicate present tense and correct relative clause structure.