Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và thiếu sự mạch lạc. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó dùng các chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên và logic hơn.

Example: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax after a long day of work or study. For example, when I feel stressed, singing calms me down and improves my mood.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, khiến ý không được truyền đạt hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, tránh lặp lại ý và dùng câu hoàn chỉnh, rõ ràng hơn.

Example: Yes, I have taken singing lessons before. Learning to sing has helped me relax and feel happier, especially when I am tired or unwell.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự mạch lạc và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

Example: I want to sing for my family and friends because it makes them happy and helps them relax. Singing for them is a way to show my love and appreciation.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có lỗi ngữ pháp, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Example: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and reduce stress after a tiring day of work or study.

× Oh, I love singing because I think when I'm singing I can maybe relax or feel really like after the day that I work a lot or study a lot, I can sing for really stress.

✓ Oh, I love singing because I think when I'm singing I can maybe relax or feel really good after a day when I work a lot or study a lot; I can sing to relieve stress.

The phrase 'sing for really stress' is incorrect; the verb 'sing' should be followed by 'to' plus a verb or noun indicating purpose. Here, 'sing to relieve stress' is correct. Also, 'feel really like' is unclear and should be 'feel really good'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Yes, I really love singing because it helped me relax after a long day of study.

✓ Yes, I really love singing because it helps me relax after a long day of study.

The sentence mixes present tense 'I really love' with past tense 'helped'. To maintain tense consistency, 'helped' should be changed to present tense 'helps' because the action is habitual.

× When I'm sick I feel less shredded and more cheerful which improved my mood significantly.

✓ When I'm sick I feel less stressed and more cheerful, which improves my mood significantly.

The word 'shredded' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'stressed'. Also, 'improved' should be present tense 'improves' to match the present tense context.

× For example like after busy.

✓ For example, after a busy day.

The phrase 'For example like after busy' is incomplete and ungrammatical. It should be 'For example, after a busy day' to be a complete and clear phrase.

× Oh, I want to sing for a lot of person around life, like my parents, my friends.

✓ Oh, I want to sing for a lot of people in my life, like my parents and my friends.

The word 'person' is singular; the plural form 'people' should be used when referring to multiple individuals. Also, 'around life' is incorrect; 'in my life' is appropriate.

× I like them a member in my family because I want to show my voices.

✓ I like them as members of my family because I want to show my voice.

The phrase 'I like them a member in my family' is incorrect; it should be 'I like them as members of my family'. Also, 'voices' should be singular 'voice' when referring to one's own voice.

× I think that's lovely for them to like and relax.

✓ I think that's lovely for them to enjoy and relax.

The phrase 'for them to like and relax' is awkward; 'enjoy and relax' better conveys the intended meaning.

× I think singing is the one of the way that people can feel relaxed after the day they work a lot or study a lot as can less stress this when you feel as it's like tired day.

✓ I think singing is one of the ways that people can feel relaxed after a day when they work or study a lot, as it can reduce stress when you feel tired.

'The one of the way' is incorrect; it should be 'one of the ways'. Also, 'can less stress this' is ungrammatical; it should be 'can reduce stress'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× I think this can bring happiness to people.

✓ I think this can bring happiness to people.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.