Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Example: No, I do not like singing because when I started, many people told me that my voice was not suitable for singing. Therefore, I decided to focus on other things like voice-over work and YouTube videos instead.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and has repetition. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repeating words and use linking words like 'because' to explain your reasons.

Example: No, I have never learned how to sing because I do not like my voice. I think training to make it melodious would not work for me, so I decided not to pursue singing lessons.

Suggestion: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect your thoughts and correct grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details.

Example: Sometimes, I think about singing for a special person, my girlfriend. She often compliments my voice, saying it is deep and pleasant. Because of that, I would like to sing a song for her someday.

Suggestion: Your answer shows good understanding but has some unclear phrases and repetition. Try to express your ideas clearly and use linking words like 'because' to explain your opinion. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

Example: Personally, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it is a beautiful way to express deep emotions through voice and tone. When someone sings pleasantly, it can please and uplift the listeners.

× No I do not like singing becauses in starting I really tried to sing but many people said that my voice wasn't made for syncing.

✓ No, I do not like singing because at the beginning I really tried to sing, but many people said that my voice wasn't made for singing.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, 'in starting' is not correct; the correct phrase is 'at the beginning'. The word 'syncing' is a wrong form here; it should be 'singing'. The conjunction 'but' is used correctly to connect two clauses. Proper punctuation and word choice improve clarity.

× I should use it for some other things like voice overing, YouTube videos than something like that so I didn't focus on singing. Now.

✓ I should use it for some other things like voice-over work, YouTube videos, or something like that, so I didn't focus on singing.

The phrase 'voice overing' is incorrect; the correct term is 'voice-over work'. The word 'than' is wrongly used; it should be 'or' to indicate alternatives. Also, the sentence needed commas for clarity. 'Now' at the end is unnecessary and disrupts the sentence flow.

× No, I haven't learned how to sing to 'cause there because I personally do not like my voice and training it to how to to make it melodious is is not a thing I.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing because I personally do not like my voice, and training it to make it melodious is not something I think will work for me.

The phrase 'to 'cause there because' is incorrect and redundant; 'because' alone suffices. The phrase 'training it to how to to make it melodious' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'training it to make it melodious'. The repetition 'is is' is a typo. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and correctness.

× I think that will work for me, so I didn't. Learn how to sing after that.

✓ I think that will work for me, so I didn't learn how to sing after that.

The period after 'didn't' incorrectly splits the sentence. 'Learn' should be in lowercase and connected to 'didn't' to form the negative past tense verb phrase 'didn't learn'.

× Sometimes I really think about singing. Ads for a special person My girlfriend, she always compliment my voice.

✓ Sometimes I really think about singing ads for a special person. My girlfriend always compliments my voice.

The sentence was fragmented and unclear. 'Ads' should be lowercase and connected to the previous sentence. The pronoun 'she' is redundant after 'My girlfriend'. The verb 'compliment' should be in third person singular form 'compliments' to agree with the subject 'My girlfriend'.

× And she always says that you was very deep and pleasant.

✓ And she always says that your voice is very deep and pleasant.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here; it should be 'your voice' to refer to the subject. The verb 'was' should be 'is' to maintain present tense agreement. The sentence is corrected for subject-verb agreement and clarity.

× I would really like to hear a song from yourself.

✓ I would really like to hear a song from you.

The reflexive pronoun 'yourself' is incorrectly used here; the correct pronoun is 'you' because the action is directed towards the person addressed, not reflexively back to the subject.

× So I was thinking about singing a song.

✓ So, I was thinking about singing a song.

Adding a comma after 'So' improves sentence flow and clarity, marking the conjunction properly.

× Personally, I do think that singing can bring happiness to people because singing and beer method of expressing your feelings, deep emotions in a way of your voice, your tone, Anne, Anne, anybody, everybody will be very pleased to hear voice in a very pleasant way.

✓ Personally, I do think that singing can bring happiness to people because singing is a better method of expressing your feelings and deep emotions through your voice and tone. Anyone and everybody will be very pleased to hear a voice in a very pleasant way.

The phrase 'singing and beer method' is incorrect; it should be 'singing is a better method'. The preposition 'in a way of your voice' is incorrect; it should be 'through your voice'. The repeated 'Anne, Anne' is likely a mishearing and removed. 'Anybody, everybody' is simplified to 'Anyone and everybody' for clarity. The article 'a' is added before 'voice' for correctness.