Singing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is natural and relevant, but it could be more concise and structured. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid contractions like 'cause' in formal speaking. For example, you can say: "Yes, I like singing because music plays an important role in my life. It brings me peace and joy; however, I prefer to sing only when I'm alone because I'm not confident about my voice."

Example: Yes, I like singing because music plays an important role in my life. It brings me peace and joy; however, I prefer to sing only when I'm alone because I'm not confident about my voice.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but lacks clarity and contains some errors. Avoid vague phrases like 'search up how to think' which is confusing. Also, try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details connected with linking words. For example, you can say: "Yes, when I was a child, I tried to learn singing by watching tutorials on YouTube and practicing vocal exercises. However, I didn't find them very effective, and I still wasn't satisfied with my voice."

Example: Yes, when I was a child, I tried to learn singing by watching tutorials on YouTube and practicing vocal exercises. However, I didn't find them very effective, and I still wasn't satisfied with my voice.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and structured. Avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to use more formal expressions instead of contractions like 'cause'. For example: "I don't want to sing for anyone because, as I mentioned earlier, I am not confident about my voice. Therefore, I prefer to sing only when I am alone."

Example: I don't want to sing for anyone because, as I mentioned earlier, I am not confident about my voice. Therefore, I prefer to sing only when I am alone.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to express your opinion clearly with correct grammar and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example: "Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music has been scientifically proven to improve mood and well-being."

Example: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because music has been scientifically proven to improve mood and well-being.

× I used to search up how to think on YouTube and I used to do some singing voice exercises, but I don't think they worked and I did not like my voice.

✓ I used to look up how to sing on YouTube and I used to do some singing voice exercises, but I don't think they worked and I did not like my voice.

The phrase 'search up' is incorrect; the correct phrasal verb is 'look up'. Also, 'how to think' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'how to sing' to match the topic. This correction improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× So yes.

✓ So, yes.

Adding a comma after 'So' improves the sentence structure by indicating a slight pause, making the response clearer and more natural in spoken English.

× Yes, music is scientifically proven to bring people joy and happiness. So yes, I do think I believe that singing and bring people happiness.

✓ Yes, music is scientifically proven to bring people joy and happiness. So yes, I do think I believe that singing can bring people happiness.

The original sentence is missing the modal verb 'can' before 'bring', which is necessary to express ability or possibility. Adding 'can' corrects the sentence structure and meaning.