Chocolate— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and coherent by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clearer reasons.

Example: No, I don't like eating chocolate because I find its smell unpleasant. Moreover, the dark colour doesn't appeal to me, and I don't enjoy the taste.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating 'chocolate' unnecessarily.

Example: Although I dislike chocolate, I eat it about twice a year since I usually receive it as a gift, which makes it special to me.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and clarity by using past tense consistently and correcting sentence structure. Also, avoid vague phrases and explain your ideas more clearly.

Example: Yes, when I was a child, I preferred sweet and attractive treats like chocolate. The charming packaging caught my attention the first time I saw it.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and grammatically correct. Use linking words and correct expressions to improve coherence.

Example: I believe chocolate is popular worldwide because it is often given as a gift. For instance, on Valentine's Day, couples exchange chocolate to express their love, which makes the occasion feel special.

Suggestion: Focus on correct grammar and natural phrasing. Use linking words to compare and explain your preferences clearly.

Example: I prefer dark chocolate to white chocolate because white chocolate is sweeter, and I don't like very sweet flavours. On the other hand, dark chocolate has a more balanced taste and helps me feel relaxed.

Suggestion: Clarify your ideas and correct vocabulary mistakes (e.g., 'Chiclets' should be 'chocolates'). Use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Example: Yes, giving chocolate as a gift is a traditional way to express love. For example, on Valentine's Day or anniversaries, people often exchange chocolates to make the occasion special.

× I suppose the smell of chocolate is so ugly and the dark color and it's not delicious for me.

✓ I suppose the smell of chocolate is very unpleasant, and the dark colour is not delicious to me.

The adjective 'ugly' is not appropriate to describe a smell; 'unpleasant' is more suitable. Also, 'dark color' should be 'dark colour' (British English spelling) and the phrase 'it's not delicious for me' should be 'is not delicious to me' to correctly express personal taste.

× Although I hate eating chocolate, I often eat chocolate twice a year because I always receive chocolate as a gift and I think it's a very memorable story behind the chocolate.

✓ Although I hate eating chocolate, I often eat chocolate twice a year because I always receive chocolate as a gift and I think there is a very memorable story behind the chocolate.

The sentence lacks the verb 'there is' to correctly express existence, which relates to the 'There be issue' (ID 3). Adding 'there is' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Yes, when I was a kid, I prefer something very sweet and beautiful, such as chocolate.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, I preferred something very sweet and beautiful, such as chocolate.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a kid'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'preferred' instead of the present tense 'prefer'.

× You know, the packaging of chocolate looks so charming and pleasant, which is expressed me at the first time I saw it.

✓ You know, the packaging of chocolate looks so charming and pleasant, which impressed me the first time I saw it.

The phrase 'which is expressed me' is incorrect. The correct verb is 'impressed' and the phrase should be 'which impressed me'. Also, 'at the first time' should be 'the first time' without 'at'.

× Well, I think chocolate is popular around the world because of the meaning of the chocolate as a gift.

✓ Well, I think chocolate is popular around the world because of its meaning as a gift.

The phrase 'the meaning of the chocolate' is awkward; 'its meaning' is more natural and concise when referring to chocolate's symbolic meaning.

× For example, every Valentine all the couple will send chocolate to each other to show their love and they will feel very special about that.

✓ For example, every Valentine, all couples send chocolate to each other to show their love, and they feel very special about that.

'Every Valentine all the couple' is incorrect. It should be 'every Valentine' or 'all couples'. Also, 'will send' and 'will feel' can be simplified to present simple 'send' and 'feel' to express habitual actions.

× I love dark chocolate rather than white chocolate because I suppose white chocolate it's sweeter and I hate sweet things like that.

✓ I love dark chocolate rather than white chocolate because I suppose white chocolate is sweeter and I hate sweet things like that.

The phrase 'white chocolate it's sweeter' is incorrect; 'it's' should be 'is' to correctly link the subject and predicate.

× In the other side dark chocolate it's more balance on the taste and it's make me feel relaxable.

✓ On the other hand, dark chocolate is more balanced in taste and it makes me feel relaxed.

'In the other side' should be 'On the other hand' to express contrast. 'More balance on the taste' should be 'more balanced in taste'. 'It's make me feel relaxable' is incorrect; it should be 'it makes me feel relaxed'.

× Yes, using chocolate as a gift is a traditional way to express human love.

✓ Yes, using chocolate as a gift is a traditional way to express love between people.

The phrase 'express human love' is awkward; 'express love between people' or simply 'express love' is more natural in English.

× For example, on Valentine's Day or Anniversary Day, people always exchange Chiclets because they want to be pleasant and special.

✓ For example, on Valentine's Day or Anniversary Day, people always exchange chocolates because they want to be pleasant and special.

'Chiclets' is a brand of chewing gum and likely incorrect here; 'chocolates' fits the context better. Also, 'want to be pleasant' is awkward; however, as per instructions, only grammar issues are corrected.