Chocolate— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. For example, avoid repeating similar ideas and focus on clear, natural phrasing.

Example: Yes, I like eating chocolate because it lifts my mood. For instance, when I feel stressed, I enjoy a piece of Dairy Milk chocolate. Therefore, I often buy it when I go shopping.

Suggestion: Provide a direct answer first, then add specific details with linking words. Use correct grammar and avoid vague phrases like 'I don't know how to eat daily chocolates.'

Example: I usually eat chocolate on weekends because I prefer sweets then. However, sometimes I enjoy chocolate during the week if I am in the mood for something sweet.

Suggestion: Focus on clear, grammatically correct sentences and avoid unclear phrases like 'cry to forgive chocolate.' Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific reasons or examples.

Example: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I enjoyed its sweet taste. My mother said I loved it so much that I would sometimes cry if I couldn't have any. However, now I avoid chocolate because I am aware of its negative health effects.

Suggestion: Give a clear, well-structured answer with specific reasons and avoid repetitive or unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide examples to support your opinion.

Example: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and can improve people's moods. For example, many women crave chocolate during their periods, which shows how it can affect emotions positively.

Suggestion: Answer directly and clearly, avoid vague statements like 'it reflects my mood.' Use linking words to explain why you like these chocolates and provide specific details.

Example: My favourite chocolates are Dairy Milk and Munch because I enjoy their creamy and crunchy textures. I usually choose them when I want a sweet treat that matches my taste preferences.

Suggestion: Provide a clear and grammatically correct answer. Avoid unclear phrases like 'on her body.' Use linking words to explain your opinion and give specific reasons or examples.

Example: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift because it expresses sweet feelings. For instance, I often give chocolate to my best friend on special occasions to show I care.

× It's depend on the my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

The modal verb 'It's' (it is) is incorrectly used here. The correct verb form is 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'the my mood' is incorrect; 'my mood' is sufficient without 'the'.

× Sometime I like to eat sweets, so at that time I like to talk.

✓ Sometimes I like to eat sweets, so at that time I like to talk.

The word 'Sometime' should be plural 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Sometime' refers to an unspecified time, while 'Sometimes' means occasionally.

× So whenever I go for shopping, I buy chocolate for my eat.

✓ So whenever I go shopping, I buy chocolate to eat.

The phrase 'go for shopping' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go shopping'. Also, 'buy chocolate for my eat' is incorrect; it should be 'buy chocolate to eat' to express purpose.

× It's depend on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

Same as previous: 'It's depend' is incorrect; the verb should be 'depends' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Modal verb 'It's' is not appropriate here.

× When I like to eat sweet at that time I prefer to eat chocolate.

✓ When I like to eat sweets, at that time I prefer to eat chocolate.

The noun 'sweet' should be plural 'sweets' when referring to sweet foods in general.

× Mostly I like to eat on weekend.

✓ Mostly I like to eat on weekends.

The phrase 'on weekend' is incorrect; the correct preposition and noun form is 'on weekends' to indicate habitual action on weekends.

× Of course, when I was a kid I liked to eat chocolate it because it is a sweet in taste.

✓ Of course, when I was a kid I liked to eat chocolate because it is sweet in taste.

The phrase 'liked to eat chocolate it because' is incorrect; 'it' is unnecessary and should be removed. Also, 'a sweet in taste' is awkward; 'sweet in taste' is better.

× Uh, my mom said you really like eat chocolate and sometimes cry to forgive chocolate.

✓ Uh, my mom said I really liked to eat chocolate and sometimes cried to get chocolate forgiven.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect; it should be 'I' to refer to the speaker. Also, the phrase 'cry to forgive chocolate' is unclear; likely intended meaning is 'cry to get chocolate' or 'cry to be forgiven for eating chocolate' but needs clarification.

× But now I know about bad effects chocolate side effect so I ignore that.

✓ But now I know about the bad side effects of chocolate, so I ignore that.

The phrase 'bad effects chocolate side effect' is redundant and awkward; it should be 'the bad side effects of chocolate'. Also, 'ignore that' is present tense and acceptable here.

× I think it's popular around the world because of sweet.

✓ I think it's popular around the world because of its sweetness.

The word 'sweet' is a noun or adjective but here 'sweetness' (noun) is more appropriate to express the quality that makes chocolate popular.

× It's a kind of a sweet and it's saying people mood most of most of the time.

✓ It's a kind of sweet and it affects people's mood most of the time.

The phrase 'it's saying people mood' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'it affects people's mood'. Also, 'most of most of the time' is redundant; 'most of the time' is correct.

× Females like to eat chocolate when they get periods at that time.

✓ Females like to eat chocolate when they have their periods.

The phrase 'when they get periods at that time' is awkward; 'when they have their periods' is the correct expression.

× So it's reflects our mood.

✓ So it reflects our mood.

The verb 'reflects' should not be preceded by 'it's' (it is); 'it reflects' is correct.

× Well, my favorite flavour is Dairy Milk and munch, so I like to eat these both chocolates.

✓ Well, my favorite flavours are Dairy Milk and Munch, so I like to eat both of these chocolates.

'Flavour' should be plural 'flavours' when listing more than one. 'These both chocolates' is incorrect; correct form is 'both of these chocolates'.

× It reflects my mood and it reflects my taste.

✓ They reflect my mood and my taste.

Since 'flavours' is plural, the pronoun should be 'they' and the verb 'reflect' should be plural to agree.

× Of course it is a good source to give gift for others, uh, because it's your feelings, uh, with sweet.

✓ Of course, it is a good idea to give gifts to others because it shows your feelings with sweetness.

The phrase 'good source to give gift for others' is incorrect; 'good idea to give gifts to others' is better. Also, 'with sweet' is awkward; 'with sweetness' or 'with a sweet gesture' is better.

× So I like to give as a gift to my best friend on her body.

✓ So I like to give it as a gift to my best friend on her birthday.

The phrase 'on her body' is incorrect; likely intended 'on her birthday'. Also, 'give as a gift' needs an object like 'it'.