Chocolate— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise.

Example: Yes, I like eating chocolate, but not too often. When I was younger, I enjoyed it a lot, but now I prefer to eat it in moderation because too much sugar is unhealthy.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat confusing and repetitive. Try to clearly state how often you eat chocolate and use linking words to explain your habits. Keep your sentences simple and direct.

Example: I rarely buy chocolate myself nowadays, but if someone offers me chocolate, I usually accept it. However, I often share it with my friends.

Suggestion: Your answer has unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Try to use a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words and keep your answer coherent.

Example: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child. My parents used to give me chocolate as a reward to encourage me to stay longer at school.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Try to avoid repetition and add more specific reasons.

Example: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes sweet and appeals to people of all ages. Moreover, its versatility in desserts makes it a favorite treat among children and adults alike.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains filler words. Try to state your preference clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: I don't have a specific favorite chocolate flavor, but I usually prefer Dairy Milk because it has a smooth and creamy taste that I enjoy.

Suggestion: Your answer conveys your opinion but is repetitive and has grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

Example: Yes, I think chocolate makes a great gift. From my experience, giving chocolate often brings happiness and smiles to the recipients' faces.

× Why or why not eating chocolate?

✓ Why or why not do you like eating chocolate?

The original sentence lacks a proper verb and auxiliary verb to form a question. In English, questions require an auxiliary verb such as 'do' to be grammatically correct. Here, 'Why or why not do you like eating chocolate?' is the correct form.

× I used to like whenever I was younger, but after I grew up I didn't like eating chocolate because I already had, I think I already had all this taste of the different chocolates.

✓ I used to like it whenever I was younger, but after I grew up, I didn't like eating chocolate because I think I had already tasted all the different chocolates.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'I used to like it' is correct for past habitual action. 'I think I had already tasted' correctly uses past perfect to indicate an action completed before another past action. Also, 'all this taste of the different chocolates' is awkward; 'tasted all the different chocolates' is clearer.

× So anything too much is not good for your health I believe.

✓ So, I believe that anything in excess is not good for your health.

The original sentence is awkward and lacks proper structure. Adding 'I believe that' and rephrasing 'anything too much' to 'anything in excess' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Nowadays I do not go myself to buy for the chocolate and if there is anyone offering to give chocolates then I can't refuse to them.

✓ Nowadays, I do not go by myself to buy chocolate, and if anyone offers me chocolates, I can't refuse them.

The phrase 'go myself to buy for the chocolate' is incorrect; 'go by myself to buy chocolate' is correct. Also, 'refuse to them' is incorrect; the verb 'refuse' does not require 'to' before the object pronoun. Correct usage is 'refuse them.'

× So I I do not want to eat.

✓ So, I do not want to eat it.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'it' clarifies what the subject does not want to eat.

× But again I will share with some of my friends of that chocolate.

✓ But again, I will share that chocolate with some of my friends.

The preposition 'with' should follow 'share' directly. 'Share with some friends' is correct, and 'of that chocolate' is unnecessary and incorrect here.

× Yesterday, during my childhood, I the most thing I like was the chocolate.

✓ During my childhood, the thing I liked the most was chocolate.

'Yesterday' is incorrectly used with 'during my childhood' which refers to a long period. Also, 'I the most thing I like' is ungrammatical. Correct past tense 'liked' is used, and sentence structure is improved.

× So therefore when I I go to the school, my parents used to give me the chocolate.

✓ Therefore, when I went to school, my parents used to give me chocolate.

The sentence has repetition 'I I' and incorrect tense 'go' for past habitual action. 'Went' is the correct past tense. Also, 'the school' is unnecessary; 'school' is sufficient.

× The, you know, like to bribe me so that I can stay longer in the school.

✓ They, you know, used to bribe me so that I could stay longer at school.

'The' is incorrect here; 'They' is appropriate as the subject. 'Like to bribe me' should be 'used to bribe me' for past habitual action. 'Stay longer in the school' should be 'stay longer at school'.

× Chocolate is so popular around the world because it's sweet and for children for different ages, it's definitely the sweet thing is accepted by everyone.

✓ Chocolate is so popular around the world because it's sweet, and for children of different ages, it's definitely a sweet thing accepted by everyone.

'For children for different ages' is incorrect; 'children of different ages' is correct. Also, 'the sweet thing is accepted' is awkward; 'a sweet thing accepted' is better.

× No one can reject it, especially the children and the youngsters.

✓ No one can reject it, especially children and youngsters.

The definite article 'the' before 'children' and 'youngsters' is unnecessary when speaking generally.

× There is no particular flavor of the chocolate that I like the most, but uh, in the shops and the restaurants around, I can see the Dairy Milk products.

✓ There is no particular flavor of chocolate that I like the most, but in the shops and restaurants around, I can see Dairy Milk products.

'The chocolate' is incorrect when speaking generally; 'chocolate' without 'the' is correct. Also, 'the shops and the restaurants' can be simplified to 'shops and restaurants.' 'The Dairy Milk products' should be 'Dairy Milk products'.

× So I would like to have the dairy flavor type of chocolate to have.

✓ So I would like to have the dairy-flavored type of chocolate.

'Dairy flavor type of chocolate to have' is awkward. 'Dairy-flavored type of chocolate' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Yes I think chocolate is good as a gift because in my personal experience if I had to give someone as a gift to that I prefer the first choice as a chocolate because because when I get handed over them and it different I can see the happiness and the smile on the face.

✓ Yes, I think chocolate is good as a gift because, in my personal experience, if I have to give someone a gift, I prefer chocolate as my first choice because when I hand it over, I can see the happiness and smile on their face.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'if I had to give' should be 'if I have to give' for present/future hypothetical. 'Give someone as a gift to that' is incorrect; it should be 'give someone a gift.' 'When I get handed over them' is incorrect; it should be 'when I hand it over.' 'It different' is unclear and removed. 'The smile on the face' should be 'smile on their face.'