Chocolate— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and improve fluency by combining ideas smoothly. Also, use simpler expressions like 'when I feel sad' instead of 'when I am in blue'.

Example: I usually avoid eating chocolate because it has a lot of calories, but when I feel sad, I like to have a small piece to cheer myself up.

Suggestion: Avoid repeating information already given. Try to make your answer more concise and clear. Also, correct grammar mistakes like 'that is other I don't like' to 'and I don't like others'.

Example: I rarely eat chocolate because of its high calories, but when I feel down, I have a single piece, and I don't like to eat more than that.

Suggestion: Try to speak more clearly and avoid repetition or stammering. Also, use correct tenses and sentence structure. For example, say 'I used to eat three types of chocolates, like Dairy Milk and Kit Kat, which made my childhood enjoyable.'

Example: When I was a child, I used to enjoy eating chocolates like Dairy Milk and Kit Kat, which made my childhood more enjoyable and memorable.

Suggestion: Good points, but improve grammar and use linking words for better coherence. For example, say 'Firstly, advertisements make chocolate popular. Secondly, it has replaced traditional sweets. Moreover, it can improve mood and make people happy.'

Example: Firstly, chocolate is popular because of advertisements. Secondly, it has replaced traditional sweets in many cultures. Moreover, eating chocolate can lighten your mood and make you feel happier.

Suggestion: Try to avoid vague statements like 'quite healthy' without explanation. Also, improve sentence flow and grammar. For example, say 'Although I usually avoid chocolates, my favourite flavour is strawberry Kit Kat because it is lower in calories.'

Example: Although I usually avoid chocolates, my favourite flavour is strawberry Kit Kat because it has fewer calories and tastes delicious.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly unclear. Try to make it more concise and grammatically correct. For example, say 'I don't usually give sweets as gifts because they are unhealthy, but for special occasions, chocolate is a good option.'

Example: I usually avoid giving sweets as gifts because they are unhealthy, but for special celebrations, chocolate is one of the best choices.

× Being a health enthusiast, I do not adore chocolates because they are quite high in calories so I avoid eating them.

✓ Being a health enthusiast, I do not adore chocolate because it is quite high in calories so I avoid eating it.

The word 'chocolate' here is used in a general sense and should be singular and uncountable. Using 'chocolates' implies countable items, which is incorrect in this context. Use 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun when referring to the substance in general.

× Being a health enthusiast, I do not adore chocolates because they are quite high in calories so I avoid eating them.

✓ Being a health enthusiast, I do not adore chocolate because it is quite high in calories, so I avoid eating it.

The sentence lacks a comma before 'so' which connects two independent clauses. Adding a comma improves clarity and correctness in conjunction usage.

× As I already mentioned that I try to avoid chocolate as much as I can because of their high calorific value.

✓ As I already mentioned, I try to avoid chocolate as much as I can because of its high calorific value.

The pronoun 'their' is plural but 'chocolate' is singular and uncountable. The correct pronoun is 'its' to match the singular noun 'chocolate'. Also, a comma is needed after 'mentioned' for clarity.

× But when I am feeling down then I have a piece of chocolate.

✓ But when I am feeling down, I have a piece of chocolate.

The word 'then' is unnecessary after 'when' in this context. Also, a comma after the dependent clause improves sentence flow.

× I only eat a single chocolate that is other I don't like.

✓ I only eat a single chocolate; other types I don't like.

The phrase 'that is other' is incorrect. It should be 'other types' or 'others' to correctly refer to other chocolates. Also, a semicolon or period is needed to separate the two independent clauses.

× Well like most children I enjoyed eating chocolate when I was in childhood I used to eat 3 candies that was Dairy Milk Kit Kat and these were my favorite ones and makes makes make made my chil chil childhood more enjoyable and memorable.

✓ Well, like most children, I enjoyed eating chocolate when I was a child. I used to eat 3 candies: Dairy Milk, Kit Kat, and these were my favorite ones. They made my childhood more enjoyable and memorable.

The original sentence is a run-on with repeated words and lacks proper punctuation. Breaking it into multiple sentences and correcting repeated words improves clarity and grammar.

× Secondly, it replace the traditional sweets that we used to eat before.

✓ Secondly, it replaces the traditional sweets that we used to eat before.

The verb 'replace' should be in third person singular form 'replaces' to agree with the singular subject 'it'.

× Moreover, it also helps to lighten up your mood and makes you more ecstatic.

✓ Moreover, it also helps to lighten up your mood and make you more ecstatic.

After 'helps to', the verb should be in base form 'make' not 'makes' because 'helps' is followed by the infinitive form without 'to'.

× Well usually I try to avoid chocolates but when I eat I only eat 1 flavour that is strawberry flavour of Kit Kat.

✓ Well, usually I try to avoid chocolate but when I eat, I only eat one flavour, which is the strawberry flavour of Kit Kat.

'Chocolates' should be 'chocolate' as an uncountable noun here. Also, '1' should be written as 'one' in formal writing. Added commas improve readability.

× It's quite healthy as well and low in calories.

✓ It is quite healthy as well and low in calories.

Contractions like 'It's' are acceptable in speech but in formal correction, expanding to 'It is' is preferred for clarity.

× Well, in my opinion I don't prefer to give someone sweet because they are not healthy, but if I have to celebrate a moment which necessarily required something sugary, so then if chocolate is one of the best option as compared to the others.

✓ Well, in my opinion, I don't prefer to give someone sweets because they are not healthy, but if I have to celebrate a moment which necessarily requires something sugary, then chocolate is one of the best options compared to others.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'sweet' should be plural 'sweets'; 'required' should be present tense 'requires' to match 'have to'; 'so then if' is redundant, only 'then' is needed; 'option' should be plural 'options'; 'as compared to the others' is better as 'compared to others'. Added commas improve clarity.