Chocolate— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. For example, say 'I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and helps me relax.' This is more natural and clear.

Example: I like eating chocolate because it tastes delicious and helps me relax after a long day.

Suggestion: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'I often eat chocolate every weekend with my friends because it helps us relax after a busy week.'

Example: I often eat chocolate every weekend with my friends because it helps us relax after a busy week.

Suggestion: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. For example, 'Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I liked it. My parents gave me a box of chocolates on my second birthday, which made me love it even more.'

Example: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child because I liked it. My parents gave me a box of chocolates on my second birthday, which made me love it even more.

Suggestion: Avoid unclear phrases and focus on clear reasons. For example, 'Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and contains sugar, which many people enjoy.'

Example: Chocolate is popular worldwide because it tastes delicious and contains sugar, which many people enjoy.

Suggestion: Try to make sentences concise and use correct grammar. For example, 'My favourite flavour is dark chocolate from America. My brother lives there and he gave me a box of American dark chocolate as a birthday present last year.'

Example: My favourite flavour is dark chocolate from America. My brother lives there and he gave me a box of American dark chocolate as a birthday present last year.

Suggestion: Use clearer sentences and avoid repetition. For example, 'Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because almost everyone likes its delicious taste. I often give chocolate as presents to others.'

Example: Yes, I think chocolate is a good gift because almost everyone likes its delicious taste. I often give chocolate as presents to others.

× I like chocolate because it have a delicious taste.

✓ I like chocolate because it has a delicious taste.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have' to agree in number.

× I often do eat chocolate on every weekend with my friends for satisfying our meal and relaxation for my room.

✓ I often eat chocolate every weekend with my friends to satisfy our meal and relax in my room.

The preposition 'on' is not used with 'every weekend'; also, 'for satisfying' and 'relaxation for my room' are incorrect phrases. Use 'to satisfy' and 'relax in my room' instead.

× A lot of work day.

✓ I have a lot of work during the day.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'I have' and 'during the day' completes the sentence meaningfully.

× Yes, I eat chocolate from my childhood because of I like chocolate and my parents provide me a box of chocolate on my 2nd birthday.

✓ Yes, I ate chocolate since my childhood because I liked chocolate and my parents provided me a box of chocolate on my 2nd birthday.

The sentence refers to past events, so past tense verbs 'ate', 'liked', and 'provided' should be used instead of present tense.

× From my second birthday I like to eat chocolate.

✓ Since my second birthday, I have liked eating chocolate.

The phrase 'From my second birthday' should be 'Since my second birthday' to indicate a starting point in the past continuing to present; also, 'have liked eating' is appropriate present perfect tense.

× Yes, chocolate popular all over the world because of a delicious taste and chocolate is a type of male type of male.

✓ Yes, chocolate is popular all over the world because of its delicious taste, and chocolate is a type of candy.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' after 'chocolate'; 'because of a delicious taste' should be 'because of its delicious taste'; 'male type of male' is incorrect and replaced with 'a type of candy' for clarity.

× It contains sugar and also many items in it and it is a very best chocolate.

✓ It contains sugar and many other ingredients, and it is a very good chocolate.

'Items in it' is vague; 'ingredients' is more appropriate. 'Very best' is incorrect; use 'very good' or 'the best'.

× My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate from American.

✓ My favorite flavor of chocolate is dark chocolate from America.

'From American' is incorrect; the correct preposition and noun form is 'from America'.

× I like to eat chocolate of American companies because my brother live in America and he preferred to eat American chocolate and last year he gave me a box on my birthday as a present of dark chocolate.

✓ I like to eat chocolate from American companies because my brother lives in America and he prefers to eat American chocolate. Last year, he gave me a box of dark chocolate as a birthday present.

'Chocolate of American companies' should be 'chocolate from American companies'; 'brother live' should be 'brother lives' (third person singular); 'he preferred' should be 'he prefers' to indicate habitual action; 'gave me a box on my birthday as a present of dark chocolate' is rephrased for clarity.

× Yes, I think it is good to gift or present a chocolate to other because chocolate is like by everyone in the world.

✓ Yes, I think it is good to gift or present chocolate to others because chocolate is liked by everyone in the world.

'Chocolate is like by everyone' is incorrect passive form; it should be 'chocolate is liked by everyone'. Also, 'a chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable here, and 'other' should be 'others'.

× I think no one like no one dislike chocolate because of a delicious taste and I mainly present this chocolate to other.

✓ I think no one likes or dislikes chocolate because of its delicious taste, and I mainly present this chocolate to others.

'No one like' should be 'no one likes' (third person singular); 'no one dislike' should be 'no one dislikes'; 'a delicious taste' should be 'its delicious taste'; 'to other' should be 'to others'.