Chocolate— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain your reason without redundancy. For example, avoid phrases like 'I like to have a sweet items very much' and instead say 'I enjoy eating sweets, especially chocolate, despite knowing its health effects.'

Example: Yes, I enjoy eating chocolate because I have a sweet tooth, even though I am aware it may not be very healthy.

Suggestion: Make your answer more coherent and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about occasions. For example, say 'I don't eat chocolate regularly, but I enjoy it during special occasions such as weddings and birthdays.'

Example: I don't eat chocolate often, but I like to have it during celebrations like weddings and birthdays.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid awkward phrasing. For example, say 'Yes, I used to eat a lot of chocolate when I was sick because I loved the taste. I often asked my parents to buy chocolate whenever we went out.'

Example: Yes, I often ate chocolate as a child, especially when I was sick, because I loved its taste and always asked my parents to buy some.

Suggestion: Make your answer more fluent and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. For example, say 'Chocolate is popular worldwide mainly because of its sweet taste, which appeals especially to children.'

Example: Chocolate is popular around the world because its sweet taste attracts many people, especially children.

Suggestion: Avoid repetition and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly. For example, say 'I like all kinds of chocolate, but I prefer Indian chocolates like Munch because they have a crunchy texture combined with sweetness.'

Example: I enjoy all chocolates, but I prefer Indian chocolates like Munch because they are crunchy and sweet.

Suggestion: Make your answer more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words. For example, say 'Yes, chocolate is a popular gift because it symbolizes love and emotional connection due to its sweet taste.'

Example: Yes, chocolate is a great gift because it represents love and a sweet relationship between people.

× I like to have a sweet items very much even though I know more about the health effects of eating chocolate.

✓ I like to have sweet items very much even though I know more about the health effects of eating chocolate.

The word 'items' is plural but preceded by the singular article 'a'. The article 'a' should be removed to correctly match the plural noun 'items'.

× whenever I get a chocolate during some celebrations or marriage celebration or birthday celebration

✓ whenever I get chocolate during some celebrations, such as marriage or birthday celebrations

The phrase 'get a chocolate during some celebrations or marriage celebration or birthday celebration' is awkward and repetitive. 'Chocolate' is an uncountable noun here, so 'a' is unnecessary. Also, 'marriage celebration' and 'birthday celebration' should be pluralized and connected properly with commas and conjunctions for clarity.

× if I get a chocolate, I will like to have it.

✓ if I get chocolate, I would like to have it.

The phrase 'I will like to have it' is incorrect. The correct modal verb to express desire is 'would like' rather than 'will like'. Also, 'a chocolate' should be 'chocolate' as it is uncountable here.

× I insisted my parents were buying chocolate wherever we go.

✓ I insisted that my parents buy chocolate wherever we went.

The verb 'insisted' requires a that-clause with the base form of the verb 'buy'. Also, 'were buying' is incorrect in this context; simple present 'buy' is used after 'insisted'. The phrase 'wherever we go' should be in past tense 'went' to match the past context.

× Chocolates are very popular because of its sweet taste and the kids like to have it very much

✓ Chocolate is very popular because of its sweet taste and kids like to have it very much

'Chocolates' is plural but the sentence refers to chocolate in general, so singular 'Chocolate' is appropriate. Also, 'its' refers to singular 'Chocolate'. 'The kids' is better as 'kids' to generalize.

× The sweet taste of chocolate can attract the attention of kids very fastly.

✓ The sweet taste of chocolate can attract the attention of kids very quickly.

'Fastly' is not a correct adverb form. The correct adverb is 'quickly' to describe how the attention is attracted.

× I like I like to have all chocolate but I do prefer Indian chocolate more than other because Indian chocolate like munch has some crunchy feeling while eating uh together with the sweetness.

✓ I like to have all chocolates but I do prefer Indian chocolates more than others because Indian chocolates like Munch have a crunchy feeling while eating together with the sweetness.

'Chocolate' should be plural 'chocolates' when referring to types or varieties. 'Other' should be plural 'others' to compare multiple items. 'Like munch' should be 'like Munch' (capitalized) and 'has' should be 'have' to agree with plural 'chocolates'. Added 'a' before 'crunchy feeling' for correctness.

× it's one of the symbol of emotional connection and love between each other.

✓ it's one of the symbols of emotional connection and love between people.

'One of the symbol' should be 'one of the symbols' to match plural. 'Between each other' is incorrect; 'between people' or 'between us' is better.

× It's symbolically represent a sweet relationship between each other.

✓ It symbolically represents a sweet relationship between people.

'It's' (it is) should be 'It' as the subject. The verb should be 'represents' to agree with singular subject. 'Between each other' is incorrect; 'between people' is better.

× the chocolate can umm, given between the two person who love between each other, I think.

✓ the chocolate can be given between two people who love each other, I think.

'Can given' is incorrect; should be 'can be given' (passive voice). 'Two person' should be 'two people'. 'Who love between each other' should be 'who love each other'.