Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (memorising/memorizing), correct small grammar errors, and use linking words to add one or two specific details. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Not really. I find it hard to remember names, so I keep a small notebook where I note down people’s names and birthdays. Also, I add important dates to my phone calendar so I get reminders in advance.

Suggestion: Provide a concise story with a clear result and use linking words (because/so/after) to explain consequences. Avoid repetition (birthdays repeated) and correct minor phrasing issues (‘mark my calendar so I wouldn’t forget’).

Example: Yes — I once forgot my mother’s birthday, which was very embarrassing. After that I started writing birthdays in a notebook and setting calendar reminders on my phone, so I haven’t missed one since.

Suggestion: Remove filler words (uh), state a clear topic sentence, and give 2–3 specific examples with a linking phrase. Use correct collocations (schedule/book appointments, so I don't forget).

Example: I need to remember both personal and work commitments. For example, I schedule doctor appointments for my son and parents, and I note down meeting times at work, so I set calendar reminders to avoid missing them.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct topic sentence, avoid repeating 'like' and 'important things', correct grammar (birthdays, plan in advance → plan ahead), and add one linking word to explain benefit. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Example: I write important events such as appointments and birthdays in a notebook and add them to my calendar. This way I get reminders and can plan ahead so I don’t forget.

× I usually struggle recalling people's names, so I have a notebook to write down names and birthdays and I always book my calendars for a special dates.

✓ I usually struggle with recalling people's names, so I have a notebook to write down names and birthdays and I always book my calendar for special dates.

The verb 'struggle' requires the preposition 'with' before a gerund (Grammar type 8). Also 'calendars' should be singular 'calendar' to match the speaker's possession and 'a special dates' is incorrect article and number; use 'special dates' without 'a'. Suggested fix: add 'with' before 'recalling', change 'calendars' to 'calendar', and remove 'a' before 'special dates'.

× Yes, I once forgot my mother's birthday. That was really embarrassing. So I decided to write down my loved ones and close friends birthdays in a notebook and mark my calendar that I wouldn't forget it again.

✓ Yes, I once forgot my mother's birthday. That was really embarrassing. So I decided to write down my loved ones' and close friends' birthdays in a notebook and mark them on my calendar so I wouldn't forget again.

Possessive plural nouns need apostrophes (Grammar type 22). 'Loved ones and close friends birthdays' should be 'loved ones' and 'close friends'' birthdays. Also 'mark my calendar that I wouldn't forget it again' is unidiomatic; use 'mark them on my calendar so I wouldn't forget again'. This corrects possessive form and clarifies meaning.

× I need to remember a lot of things regarding my personal and work life, for example the uh, doctor appointments for my son and my parents and meeting times at work. So I always book these times in my calendar to not forget.

✓ I need to remember a lot of things regarding my personal and work life, for example doctor appointments for my son and my parents and meeting times at work. So I always put these times in my calendar so I don't forget.

Remove the article 'the' before 'doctor appointments' because it's general (Grammar type 11). 'Book these times in my calendar' is understandable but more natural is 'put these times in my calendar'. Also 'to not forget' is awkward; use 'so I don't forget' to express purpose/result clearly.

× I always write down the important things like appointments or special events like birthday in my notebook and mark them in my calendar. It helps me to not forget them and the plan in advance.

✓ I always write down important things like appointments or special events such as birthdays in my notebook and mark them in my calendar. It helps me not to forget them and to plan in advance.

'the important things' can be correct but 'the plan in advance' is incorrect—needs infinitive 'to plan' and 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' when referring generally (Grammar type 22). Also 'It helps me to not forget' is better as 'It helps me not to forget' or 'It helps me remember'. Made adjustments for article usage, plural noun, and infinitive verb form.