Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes or No), then give one or two specific reasons and an example. Reduce hesitations and repeated words. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas and correct unclear words (e.g., "akula" unclear).

Example: Not very good. I struggle to memorise facts because I forget details quickly, so I always write things down. For example, I check my phone notes every morning to review my schedule so I don't miss appointments.

Suggestion: Answer directly about a specific incident of forgetting something important, then give a concise reason and one brief consequence. Avoid repetition and vague phrases like "other kind of things." Use linking words such as "because" or "for example."

Example: Yes, I once forgot a class assignment deadline because I was meeting many new friends from different countries and focused on socialising. As a result, I missed the submission and had to ask the teacher for an extension.

× Umm, to be honest, I'm actually opposed to good time memorizing things first.

✓ Umm, to be honest, I'm actually not very good at memorizing things.

The original sentence uses 'opposed to good time memorizing' which is ungrammatical; the intended meaning is inability or lack of skill, so use the adjective phrase 'not very good at memorizing things.' Also word order and collocations require 'good at' + gerund. Suggestion: use 'good at' followed by the -ing form for abilities.

× Uh, the reason why I why I checked the math every day is because of my, uh, memorizing habit.

✓ Uh, the reason why I check the math every day is because of my memorizing habit.

The sentence mixes tenses and repeats words. The prompt context is present habitual action, so use simple present 'check' not past 'checked.' Also use a single instance of 'why.' Suggestion: remove repetition and match habitual tense: 'I check'.

× I'm not strongest at memorizing, so when I go outside, I always check the akula or follow my friend.

✓ I'm not very good at memorizing, so when I go out, I always check my notes or follow my friend.

'Not strongest' is incorrect adjective usage; use 'not very good' to express a lack of skill. 'Go outside' is acceptable but 'go out' is more natural for leaving home. 'Akula' seems like a wrong word; likely 'agenda' or 'notes' fits context, so replace with 'notes.' Suggestion: use natural collocations: 'good at + gerund' and 'check my notes'.

× Nowadays I met a lot of friends in my in my new school, so they they came to a multiple different country.

✓ Nowadays I have met a lot of friends at my new school, and they come from many different countries.

The original mixes past 'met' with 'nowadays' and repeats words. Use present perfect 'have met' to describe recent experiences relevant now. 'In my new school' should be 'at my new school.' 'They came to a multiple different country' is ungrammatical; correct: 'they come from many different countries.' Suggestion: use present perfect for recent experiences and correct prepositions and quantifier usage.

× So it's a little bit challenging for me to remember their hobbies or other kind of things.

✓ So it's a little bit challenging for me to remember their hobbies or other kinds of things.

'Other kind of things' is incorrect; use plural 'other kinds of things' or 'other things.' Also 'a little bit challenging' is fine. Suggestion: match plural forms when referring to multiple items: 'kinds' and 'things' plural.

× Umm, I'm living in Toronto alone, so I need to be responsive for everything by myself.

✓ Umm, I live in Toronto alone, so I need to be responsible for everything by myself.

'I'm living' can be present continuous but 'I live' is more natural for residency. 'Need to be responsive' misuses 'responsive' (meaning quick to react); the intended word is 'responsible.' Preposition 'for' is correct after 'responsible.' Suggestion: use correct adjective 'responsible' to indicate duty and prefer simple present for permanent situations.

× And uh, there are a lot of things to remember for.

✓ And uh, there are a lot of things to remember.

The preposition 'for' at the end is unnecessary and creates an incomplete prepositional phrase. Remove 'for' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: end sentence with the object 'things to remember' or add a complement after 'for' if needed.

× For instance, I need to remember the direction of coming to home.

✓ For instance, I need to remember the directions for getting home.

'Direction of coming to home' is ungrammatical; use 'directions for getting home' or 'the way to get home.' Use plural 'directions' when referring to route steps. Suggestion: use 'get home' or 'getting home' and 'directions'.

× I usually use the notes on my phone.

✓ I usually use the notes on my phone.

This sentence is grammatically correct; it uses the noun 'notes' properly. No change needed. Explanation: 'use' + object 'the notes' is correct; the phrase indicates habitual action.

× The reason uh, why I use my **** notes, not a original note.

✓ The reason why I use my saved notes, not an original notebook,

The original has article errors: 'a original note' should be 'an original note' because 'original' begins with a vowel sound. Also phrase 'my **** notes' is unclear; I replaced with 'my saved notes' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'an' before vowel sounds and choose clear nouns.

× It's because I always bring my phone every day. In other words, it is easy to.

✓ It's because I always bring my phone every day. In other words, it's easy to access them.

The final sentence is incomplete ('it is easy to.'). Add the verb and object to complete the thought: 'easy to access them.' Suggestion: complete sentences with an appropriate verb phrase and object.