Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar; avoid fillers (uh) and fix subject-verb agreement. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Aim for 2–3 sentences and use varied vocabulary.

Example: Yes, I am good at memorising things. For example, in school I enjoyed taking part in memorable programs because preparing lines helped me remember information and boosted my confidence.

Suggestion: Provide a clear past example with correct tense and complete sentences; remove hesitations and finish the story. Use linking words (however, once) and specific detail about consequences.

Example: I don't usually forget important things; however, once after a long trip I forgot my house keys. As a result I had to wait outside for an hour until a family member returned home, which taught me to double-check my things before leaving.

Suggestion: Give a concise main statement then add two specific daily items and use linking words to organise ideas. Avoid repetitive phrasing like 'with myself' and simplify language.

Example: As an employee, I need to remember several things every day. For instance, I must bring the office keys because I usually open the office, and I also carry my laptop and reference books for meetings.

Suggestion: Use correct verb forms and a clear structure: state the method, then give a specific example of how you use it. Avoid fillers and keep it to two sentences.

Example: I remember important things by writing notes in my planner. For example, I list tasks and set reminders on specific dates so I don't forget deadlines or meetings.

× Back in school, uh, those memorable programs was my, uh, were my favorite and they gave me a sense of confidence.

✓ Back in school, those memorable programs were my favorite and they gave me a sense of confidence.

The original contains a mix of verb forms 'was' and 'were' with a plural subject 'programs'. This is a third person singular/plural agreement error. Use 'were' for plural subjects. Also remove redundant fragments for clarity.

× I don't usually forget important things, uh, and I'm very careful, uh, but I can remember, I have once forgotten my, uh, house keys and after a long trip, I came home and I just saw that I have.

✓ I don't usually forget important things and I'm very careful, but once I forgot my house keys; after a long trip I came home and realized I didn't have them.

The sentence mixes present and past incorrectly and uses awkward phrasing 'I have once forgotten' and 'I just saw that I have.' The action happened in the past, so past simple should be used: 'once I forgot' and 'realized I didn't have them.' Also replace informal filler and clarify pronoun reference.

× I'm an employee and I have to make sure that I have the office keys and I'm normally the first person in the morning who opens the doors for everybody and I have to bring my laptop and my books with myself too.

✓ I'm an employee and I have to make sure that I have the office keys; I'm normally the first person in the morning to open the doors for everybody, and I have to bring my laptop and my books with me too.

Problems: 'the first person ... who opens' is acceptable but 'to open' is more natural; 'with myself' is incorrect usage of reflexive pronoun—use 'with me.' Also improve sentence flow by using punctuation and removing redundancy.

× I love to making notes and write down details on my planner and in this way I can make sure that I will not, uh, forget any important things.

✓ I love making notes and writing down details in my planner, and in this way I can make sure that I do not forget any important things.

Mixes infinitive and -ing forms incorrectly: 'love to making' is wrong. After 'love' you can use either 'to make' or 'making'; keep parallel structure: 'love making notes and writing down details.' Also use 'do not forget' rather than future 'will not' for habitual action.