Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: คุณควรตอบคำถามให้ตรงประเด็นและใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนมากขึ้น เช่น หลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่จำเป็นและคำเชื่อมที่ไม่เหมาะสม เพื่อให้คำตอบดูเป็นธรรมชาติและเข้าใจง่าย

Example: I am not very good at memorising things because I often forget what my friends tell me.

Suggestion: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและคำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'because' และ 'however' เพื่อให้คำตอบมีความสมเหตุสมผลและลื่นไหลมากขึ้น

Example: I have forgotten important things before because I didn't plan ahead, but I try to repeat information to improve my memory.

Suggestion: ควรจัดลำดับความคิดให้ชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'so' และ 'first' เพื่อให้คำตอบมีความชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น

Example: In my daily life, I need to remember the steps at work and prioritise which tasks to do first.

Suggestion: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจนและมีความหมายตรงประเด็น หลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่เข้าใจหรือผิดพลาด และใช้คำเชื่อมที่เหมาะสมเพื่อให้คำตอบสมบูรณ์และเข้าใจง่าย

Example: I remember important things by focusing on them carefully and repeating them in my mind.

× I think in my opinion I'm not uh memorizing person because too many times when my friend talk with me I can't remember anything.

✓ I think, in my opinion, I'm not a memorizing person because many times when my friend talks with me, I can't remember anything.

The verb 'talk' should be in third person singular form 'talks' to agree with the singular subject 'my friend'. Also, 'memorizing person' is awkward; adding 'a' before it makes it grammatically correct. Additionally, 'too many times' is better expressed as 'many times' here for naturalness.

× I used to forgotten something important before, but because of I lose forecasting.

✓ I used to forget something important before, but because of losing focus.

The phrase 'used to' should be followed by the base form of the verb, so 'forgotten' is incorrect; it should be 'forget'. Also, 'because of I lose forecasting' is ungrammatical; it should be 'because of losing focus' or similar to express the intended meaning.

× But however I try to repeat and improve my memory.

✓ However, I try to repeat and improve my memory.

Using both 'But' and 'however' together is redundant. Choose one; 'However' is appropriate here and should be followed by a comma.

× Now my daily life is but with work, so every time I have to remember about my step at work and I can order step priority which one first?

✓ Now my daily life is mostly about work, so every time I have to remember my steps at work and I can prioritize which step comes first.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'But with work' is incorrect; 'mostly about work' is clearer. 'Remember about my step' should be 'remember my steps'. 'Order step priority which one first?' is ungrammatical; 'prioritize which step comes first' is correct.

× If it is important thing I think I can remember because of bison is Nixon everyone if have something important maybe can memories.

✓ If it is an important thing, I think I can remember because everyone can remember something important.

The original sentence contains many unclear and incorrect words ('bison is Nixon'). The pronouns and sentence structure are incorrect. Replacing with a clear sentence using correct pronouns and structure improves clarity and grammar.