Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific details. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, start with 'I used to have a poor memory when I was young, but now it has improved significantly.'

Example: I used to have a poor memory when I was young, but now it has improved significantly because I practice memorising daily. For instance, I remember important dates and facts more easily than before.

Suggestion: Answer directly and clearly. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to contrast ideas. Avoid unclear phrases and redundancy. For example, say 'I rarely forget important things; however, I sometimes forget minor details that are not essential.'

Example: I rarely forget important things; however, I sometimes forget minor details like where I put my keys because they are not very important to me.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. Use linking words like 'because' and 'also' properly. Avoid vague phrases like 'another choice'. For example, say 'I need to remember appointments and tasks, so I write them down in a notebook because it helps me stay organised.'

Example: I need to remember appointments and tasks, so I write them down in a notebook because it helps me stay organised and reduces stress. Also, I plan to use digital apps in the future for better efficiency.

Suggestion: Give a clear and complete answer with specific examples. Use linking words like 'for example' to clarify. Avoid incomplete sentences and repetition. For example, say 'I write important information in my notebook, which helps me remember dates like my first day at school.'

Example: I write important information in my notebook, which helps me remember dates like my first day at school or important meetings. This method improves my memory and keeps me organised.

× Actually, when I was a young my, my memories are so bad and currently I believe that my memories are really improved and also it's really a good memory in the future.

✓ Actually, when I was young, my memory was so bad and currently I believe that my memory has really improved and also it will be really good in the future.

The phrase 'a young my' is incorrect; 'young' is an adjective and should not be preceded by 'a' or followed by 'my'. 'Memories are so bad' should be singular 'memory was so bad' because 'memory' here refers to the general ability, which is uncountable. 'My memories are really improved' is incorrect; the present perfect 'has really improved' is appropriate to indicate change over time. 'It's really a good memory in the future' is awkward; 'it will be really good in the future' correctly expresses future expectation.

× However, in the future I'm looking forward to.

✓ However, in the future, I'm looking forward to it.

The phrase 'I'm looking forward to' requires an object to complete the meaning. Adding 'it' clarifies what the speaker is anticipating. Also, a comma after 'However' improves sentence clarity.

× Actually no, I don't forget the important thing.

✓ Actually, no, I don't forget important things.

The phrase 'the important thing' is too specific and singular; 'important things' is more natural when speaking generally. Also, commas after 'Actually' and 'no' improve readability.

× Also I I often forget the small thing I don't need for it because I really make for it interesting thing to do also.

✓ Also, I often forget small things I don't need because I focus on more interesting things to do.

'The small thing' should be plural 'small things' to match the general statement. The original sentence is confusing and ungrammatical; rephrasing clarifies meaning. 'I really make for it interesting thing to do also' is incorrect; 'I focus on more interesting things to do' conveys the intended meaning.

× Currently I write everything in the note, it help me to remember things easier than my memory.

✓ Currently, I write everything in a notebook; it helps me remember things more easily than relying on my memory.

'The note' is incorrect; 'a notebook' or 'notes' is appropriate. 'It help' should be 'it helps' for subject-verb agreement. 'Remember things easier' should be 'remember things more easily' because 'easily' is an adverb modifying 'remember'. Also, a semicolon or period separates the two independent clauses.

× Also it helped me to improve my memory to be better and however in the future I'm looking forward to get another choice.

✓ Also, it has helped me improve my memory, and in the future, I'm looking forward to having another option.

'Helped' is past tense; present perfect 'has helped' is better to show relevance to present. 'To be better' is awkward; 'improve my memory' is clearer. 'Looking forward to get' is incorrect; 'looking forward to having' is correct because 'look forward to' is followed by a noun or gerund. 'Another choice' is better as 'another option' for naturalness.

× In fact, I have written everything is important in the notebook.

✓ In fact, I have written down everything that is important in the notebook.

'Have written everything is important' is ungrammatical; 'have written down everything that is important' correctly uses a relative clause and phrasal verb 'written down' to indicate recording information.

× It helped me to improve my memories and to remember a simple thing or a important thing such as the the the first date of me, also the first.

✓ It has helped me improve my memory and remember simple or important things, such as my first date, and so on.

'Memories' should be singular 'memory' when referring to the ability. 'A simple thing or a important thing' should be 'simple or important things' for natural plural usage. 'The the the' is a repetition error. 'The first date of me' is unnatural; 'my first date' is correct. 'Also the first' is incomplete and unclear; 'and so on' or similar phrase is better to indicate continuation.