Memory— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“memory things”应为“memorising things”，“as the age grow”应为“as I get older”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更自然的表达。

Example: I'm not very good at memorising things because as I get older, my memory isn't as sharp. However, I always try my best to remember important information to make my life easier.

Suggestion: 回答中有多处语法错误和用词不当，如“forgotten something friendly”应为“forgotten something important”，“my birth my daughters birthday”表达混乱。建议使用清晰的句子结构，注意时态和单复数。

Example: Yes, I once forgot my daughter's birthday yesterday, which made her very sad and she cried. I felt terrible too, and since then, I try hard to remember important dates.

Suggestion: 回答中表达不够准确，如“the important day”应为“important dates”，句子结构有些混乱。建议使用更具体的细节，并注意连贯性和语法正确。

Example: I need to remember many things daily, like important dates and shopping for my family. To help, I often write lists on paper or on my phone and check them regularly.

Suggestion: 回答中语法错误较多，句子冗长且不够连贯。建议简化句子，使用连接词使表达更流畅，并注意冠词和介词的正确使用。

Example: I use two methods to remember important things. One is writing notes on paper and keeping them in my wallet. The other is making lists on my phone, so I can check them anytime.

× Actually I'm not good at memory things because I'm not very young and as the age grow I can't remember all all of the things and but I will try my best to remember the important things so that I can make my life more better.

✓ Actually I'm not good at memorising things because I'm not very young and as I age I can't remember all of the things, but I will try my best to remember the important things so that I can make my life better.

“memory things”应改为“memorising things”，因为“memory”是名词，不能直接修饰“things”，应使用动名词形式“memorising”。“as the age grow”应改为“as I age”，因为“age”在这里指人的年龄，需用第一人称代词。

× Actually I'm not good at memory things because I'm not very young and as the age grow I can't remember all all of the things and but I will try my best to remember the important things so that I can make my life more better.

✓ Actually I'm not good at memorising things because I'm not very young and as I age I can't remember all of the things, but I will try my best to remember the important things so that I can make my life better.

“all all of the things”重复，应改为“all of the things”。

× Actually I'm not good at memory things because I'm not very young and as the age grow I can't remember all all of the things and but I will try my best to remember the important things so that I can make my life more better.

✓ Actually I'm not good at memorising things because I'm not very young and as I age I can't remember all of the things, but I will try my best to remember the important things so that I can make my life better.

“and but”是错误的连词搭配，应使用“but”表示转折。

× Actually I'm not good at memory things because I'm not very young and as the age grow I can't remember all all of the things and but I will try my best to remember the important things so that I can make my life more better.

✓ Actually I'm not good at memorising things because I'm not very young and as I age I can't remember all of the things, but I will try my best to remember the important things so that I can make my life better.

“more better”是错误的比较级用法，“better”已经是比较级，不能再加“more”。

× Yes I have ever forgotten something friendly.

✓ Yes, I have forgotten something important.

“have ever forgotten”用法不当，正确表达应为“have forgotten”。“something friendly”语义不清，应改为“something important”。

× For example I just forgot my birth my daughters birthday yesterday.

✓ For example, I just forgot my daughter's birthday yesterday.

“daughters birthday”缺少所有格，应为“daughter's birthday”。

× My daughter feel very sad and she was cried to me.

✓ My daughter felt very sad and she cried to me.

“feel”应使用过去式“felt”，因为描述的是过去的事情。“was cried”错误，正确用法是主动语态“she cried”。

× I have two methods to remember the important things when a way is to write in the paper and I can keep the paper in my wallet and the other way to remember is I can make list in my on my phone and so that I can remember the important things.

✓ I have two methods to remember important things. One way is to write on paper and keep it in my wallet, and the other way is to make a list on my phone so that I can remember important things.

“write in the paper”应改为“write on paper”，因为写在纸上用“on”。“make list in my on my phone”结构混乱，应改为“make a list on my phone”。