Machine— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatical, add a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and finish the sentence properly.

Example: My favorite machine at home is my hair dryer because I have very thick hair that takes a long time to air-dry. As a result, the hair dryer saves me at least 20 minutes each morning and reduces the risk of catching a cold after washing my hair.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., because, therefore). Avoid long run-on sentences and ensure correct word choice (e.g., 'vacuum' instead of 'traditional sweeper').

Example: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are essential because they save time and produce more consistent results. For example, a washing machine can clean large loads quickly, and a vacuum cleaner picks up fine dust that sweeping often misses.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give a brief reason and an example, using linking words and correct grammar. Remove hesitations and duplicated words.

Example: Usually I don't read the instructions unless the device seems complicated, because I prefer to figure things out by myself. For instance, I only read the manual for furniture with many parts, but I skip it for simple appliances like a kettle.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, then provide concise, specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words; finish with a short consequence or recommendation.

Example: Yes, it's important to read instructions because they explain safety precautions and proper usage, which can prevent accidents. Therefore, even if reading the manual feels tedious, I usually skim the safety section before using a new electrical appliance.

× So hair dryer makes it very easy to dry it and it just takes.

✓ So the hair dryer makes it very easy to dry it and it doesn't take long.

Missing article before singular countable noun 'hair dryer' and sentence fragment 'it just takes' is incomplete. Use 'the' for a specific item and complete the idea with 'doesn't take long' to indicate short duration.

× Yes, of course, washing machine, sweeping machines are all important for cleaning our clothes and cleaning the floor and it's very easy and convenient, unlike traditional method where we use our hands and it just takes a very long time to dry, do wash and dry our clothes and takes a very long time for traditional sweeper.

✓ Yes, of course, washing machines and sweeping machines are all important for cleaning our clothes and the floor, and they are very easy and convenient, unlike traditional methods where we use our hands; those methods take a very long time to wash and dry clothes and to sweep floors.

Incorrect singular/plural use: 'washing machine' should be plural 'washing machines' to match 'sweeping machines'; 'traditional method' should be plural 'traditional methods'; pronoun and verb agreement require plural forms ('they are', 'those methods take'). Also clarified sentence structure for readability.

× So hair dryer makes it very easy to dry it and it just takes.

✓ So the hair dryer makes it very easy to dry it and it doesn't take long.

Third-person singular verbs require appropriate auxiliary for negation. The original fragment 'it just takes' lacks an object and auxiliary; using 'it doesn't take long' correctly forms third-person singular negation and completes the meaning.

× No, unless I really had to and if the device or the machine takes a complicated process to assemble.

✓ No, unless I really have to or if the device requires a complicated assembly process.

Incorrect verb tense and phrasing: 'had to' conflicts with general present habit—use 'have to'. 'Takes a complicated process to assemble' is awkward; use 'requires a complicated assembly process' or 'is complicated to assemble'. This uses correct present-tense habitual form and noun phrase.

× Otherwise I just use my brain and I I get too lazy to look at the instructions.

✓ Otherwise I just rely on my experience and often get too lazy to read the instructions.

Repetition 'I I' and informal phrasing 'use my brain' are awkward. Replacing with 'rely on my experience' clarifies the idea; 'often' makes frequency explicit. 'Read the instructions' is more natural than 'look at'.

× I believe it's very important to read the instructions for safety concerns regarding electric, electric devices.

✓ I believe it's very important to read the instructions for safety concerns regarding electrical devices.

Incorrect adjective form 'electric, electric devices' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'electrical devices' (adjective form) and remove duplication. This makes the noun phrase grammatically correct.

× It's a it's a very important to read the instruction.

✓ It's very important to read the instructions.

Redundant filler 'It's a it's a' and article/noun mismatch: use plural 'instructions' as manuals are typically plural; remove extra 'a'. This corrects structure and number.

× However, most people like me just go ahead and assemble the device and hope for the best.

✓ However, most people like me just go ahead and assemble the device and hope for the best.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no correction needed. Included here to confirm no change is required.

× and it's very easy and convenient, unlike traditional method where we use our hands and it just takes a very long time to dry, do wash and dry our clothes and takes a very long time for traditional sweeper.

✓ and they are very easy and convenient, unlike traditional methods where we use our hands; those methods take a very long time to wash and dry our clothes, and traditional sweeping takes a very long time.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and clarity. 'It just takes' is unclear—replace with 'those methods take' to match plural 'methods'. Ensure verbs agree with plural subjects and separate ideas about washing/drying and sweeping for clarity.