Machine— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, limit to about 3–4 concise sentences, use linking words for reasons, and provide specific examples. Correct common grammar errors (this → it, take → takes, safe for lots of water → saves water, affection very infection → reduces risk of infection).

Example: My favourite machine at home is the dishwasher. I like it because it saves me a lot of time washing dishes and uses less water than hand washing. For example, I run it almost every day, which frees up time for studying or relaxing.

Suggestion: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers, and use clear reasons with linking words. Be specific about who benefits and how. Use correct forms (wanna → want to, physical efforts → physical effort, convenient → they are convenient).

Example: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important. They help busy people save time and avoid tiring physical work. For instance, after a long day at work, I use the washing machine to do laundry quickly so I can relax in the evening.

Suggestion: Answer directly and concisely. Use correct verb forms and clear linking words (because, so). Be specific about what you read (safety symbols, manual) and why (prevent damage, ensure correct setup). Avoid repetition and fillers.

Example: Yes, I always read the manual and check the safety symbols before using a new machine. This helps me assemble and operate it correctly, so it works efficiently and I avoid damaging it.

Suggestion: Start with a clear opinion and give two concise reasons with linking words. Use correct vocabulary (affectionately → efficiently; afford the damage → avoid damage). Be specific about consequences of not reading instructions.

Example: Yes, it's definitely important to read and follow instructions. If you assemble or operate a machine incorrectly, it may not work efficiently and could be damaged or even be unsafe to use.

× Well my favorite machine at home would be a dishwasher because this take me a lot of time washing dishes and umm it's also safe for lots of water when using it and it environment friendly and affection very infection.

✓ Well, my favorite machine at home would be a dishwasher because it saves me a lot of time washing dishes, it also uses less water when you use it, and it is environmentally friendly and reduces contamination.

Errors: 'this take' uses wrong pronoun and wrong verb form; should be 'it saves' (present simple) for habitual effect. 'safe for lots of water' is incorrect phrasing; corrected to 'uses less water'. 'it environment friendly' misses the verb 'is' and has incorrect adjective form; corrected to 'it is environmentally friendly'. 'affection very infection' is unintelligible and likely intends 'reduces infection' or 'reduces contamination'; corrected accordingly. Suggestion: Use appropriate subject pronoun 'it', use present simple for general truths/habits (saves, uses), include linking verb 'is' with adjectives ('is environmentally friendly'), and choose accurate nouns ('contamination' or 'risk of infection').

× I use almost every day with safe me plenty of my spare time.

✓ I use it almost every day, which saves me a lot of my spare time.

Errors: Missing object 'it' after 'use'. 'safe me' is wrong verb; should be 'saves me'. Word order and connectors incorrect; corrected with relative clause 'which saves me'. Suggestion: Include necessary objects, use correct verb forms, and connect ideas with appropriate clauses for clarity.

× Yes, I think washing machine and sweeping machine are really important, umm, with two people who have to have the schedule.

✓ Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are really important for two people who have tight schedules.

Errors: Singular nouns 'washing machine' and 'sweeping machine' should be plural when speaking generally. 'sweeping machine' is unnatural; 'vacuum cleaner' is the correct term. 'have to have the schedule' is awkward; corrected to 'have tight schedules'. Suggestion: Use plural forms for general statements and natural vocabulary ('vacuum cleaner'), and use idiomatic expressions ('tight schedules').

× So after a long day, you don't wanna do a lot of, uh, physical efforts and you wanna save the time for relaxing and UN quote after a long day at work.

✓ So after a long day, you don't want to do a lot of physical effort and you want to save time for relaxing after work.

Errors: 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'physical efforts' is uncountable in this context; use 'physical effort'. Redundant phrase 'after a long day' repeated; removed repetition. 'save the time' should be 'save time'. 'UN quote' is unnecessary. Suggestion: Use standard forms ('want to'), use uncountable nouns appropriately, and avoid repetition and filler phrases.

× So it really, uh, convenient to have these.

✓ So it is really convenient to have them.

Errors: Missing auxiliary verb 'is' before 'convenient'. 'these' should be 'them' as pronoun referring to machines. Suggestion: Ensure sentences have proper linking verbs and use correct pronouns referring back to earlier nouns.

× Yes, I always read and follow the instruction from the symbol, uh, instruction book because it important that to book, uh, install all the parts of the machine together, uh, once it already, uh, set up, we will work more effectively and revenge damage, uh, of the machine and.

✓ Yes, I always read and follow the instructions in the instruction book because it is important to assemble all the parts of the machine correctly; once it is set up, it will work more effectively and avoid damage.

Errors: 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'from the symbol, instruction book' is awkward; 'in the instruction book' is natural. Missing 'is' in 'it important'. 'that to book, install' is confused; intended meaning is 'to assemble' or 'to install'. 'once it already set up' missing 'is' and wrong adverb order; corrected to 'once it is set up'. 'we will work more effectively and revenge damage' is incorrect: machines 'work' and we do not 'revenge damage'; correct is 'it will work more effectively and avoid damage'. Suggestion: Use plural 'instructions', include linking verbs, use clear verbs like 'assemble' or 'install', and ensure subject references ('it') match the intended noun.

× Yeah, it's, it's absolutely important to reach and follow the instruction, uh, because all you need to assemble all the parts together so that it can work more affectionately and also afford the damage, uh, unnecessary damage from the machine if it not installed correctly.

✓ Yeah, it's absolutely important to read and follow the instructions because you need to assemble all the parts correctly so that it can work more efficiently and avoid unnecessary damage if it is not installed correctly.

Errors: 'reach' should be 'read'. 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'all you need to assemble all the parts together' is redundant; simplified. 'afford the damage' is wrong; should be 'avoid damage'. 'work more affectionately' is wrong word; should be 'work more efficiently'. Missing 'is' in 'if it not installed correctly' corrected to 'if it is not installed correctly'. Suggestion: Use correct verbs ('read'), plural forms for 'instructions', appropriate vocabulary ('efficiently', 'avoid'), and include necessary auxiliary verbs.