Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Begin with a clear direct answer to the question, then give relevant reasons or examples about patience (not health). Avoid unrelated information and keep to 2–3 concise sentences. Use linking words for coherence (e.g., because, so, however).

Example: No, I'm not a very patient person. I often get frustrated when things take too long because I prefer to finish tasks quickly, so I try to set time limits to manage my impatience.

Suggestion: Answer directly with one clear cause, then provide a specific example and use linking words. Avoid repetition and check grammar (e.g., 'impatient' not 'impatience').

Example: Heavy workloads make me impatient because when I have many tasks and tight deadlines, I feel stressed; for example, last month I had three reports due in two days and I became impatient trying to finish them.

Suggestion: Start with a topic sentence stating your feeling, then add a specific reason and a brief consequence or coping strategy. Use correct tense and concise phrasing.

Example: I usually feel bored when I do the same task for a long time because it becomes repetitive; therefore, I take short breaks or change tasks to stay motivated.

Suggestion: Give a direct yes/no then explain with a clear, job-related example showing why patience is needed. Use linking words (because, for example) and correct grammar (e.g., 'requires' and 'customers').

Example: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I handle customer inquiries; for example, when a customer is upset I need to stay calm and listen carefully before offering a solution.

Suggestion: Compare past and present clearly: start with a direct statement (yes/no), then give reasons and a short example. Use correct comparative language and avoid repeating words. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: No, I'm less patient now than when I was a child. As an adult I have more responsibilities and time pressure, so I often feel less tolerant of delays compared with the more carefree attitude I had as a child.

× I am healthy person because I walk in the morning everyday which makes me fit.

✓ I am a healthy person because I walk in the morning every day, which keeps me fit.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before 'healthy person' (article error). 'every day' should be two words when meaning 'each day'. Comma before the non-restrictive clause improves clarity and 'keeps me fit' is a more natural collocation than 'makes me fit'.

× I eat healthy food so I don't become a patient person.

✓ I eat healthy food, so I don't become a sick person.

The sentence used 'patient person' incorrectly to mean 'not sick'. This is a word-choice/quantifier sense error; replacing with 'sick person' corrects meaning. Also add a comma before 'so' joining clauses.

× As I earlier mentioned that I'm not a patient person, but in some of cases there is a workload makes me impatience, workload is enough workload makes me impatience because there is a lots of work, I have to complete it on time.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I'm not a patient person, but in some cases a heavy workload makes me impatient because there is a lot of work I have to complete on time.

Multiple errors: word order 'mentioned earlier' is preferred; 'in some of cases' should be 'in some cases' (preposition/phrase error). 'there is a workload makes me impatience' is ungrammatical (sentence structure and verb form); correct structure: 'a heavy workload makes me impatient' (use adjective 'heavy' and adjective 'impatient' not noun 'impatience'). 'a lots of work' should be 'a lot of work' (quantifier). Commas improve readability.

× I feel bored when I have do something for a long time because we I do usually have one stable work from a long time that feeds me a bored so I need some refreshment to do the new thing.

✓ I feel bored when I have to do something for a long time because I usually do one stable type of work for a long period, which makes me bored, so I need some variety to do new things.

Many structure and word-form errors: 'have do' should be 'have to do' (missing 'to'). 'we I do usually have' is garbled; correct is 'I usually do'. 'one stable work from a long time' -> 'one stable type of work for a long period' (preposition and noun choice). 'feeds me a bored' is incorrect; use 'makes me bored'. 'refreshment' is awkward; 'variety' fits better. Ensure plural 'new things' to match general meaning.

× Yes, my job require me to be patient because my job is according to handle the customer.

✓ Yes, my job requires me to be patient because my job involves handling customers.

Subject-verb agreement: 'job' is singular so the verb should be 'requires' (third person singular). 'is according to handle' is incorrect phrasing; use 'involves handling'. Use plural 'customers' for general reference (quantifier/number).

× How could I deal with the customer so it's the reason to be become a patient.

✓ I have to be patient when dealing with customers, so that is the reason I need to be patient.

Pronoun and phrasing errors: 'How could I deal with the customer' is awkward; better to state the obligation. 'become a patient' is incorrect use of 'patient' as a noun meaning 'sick'—here it should be the adjective 'patient'. 'to be become' is ungrammatical; correct forms: 'need to be patient' or 'have to be patient'.

× When I was a child, yes I am more patient than now than when then when I was a child.

✓ When I was a child, I was more patient than I am now.

Tense inconsistency: comparing past and present requires past for the past state and present for the current state. The original mixes 'was' and 'am' incorrectly and repeats phrases. Simplify to 'I was more patient than I am now.'

× Because childhood is the age where we is not sense of understanding but in the adult age we have a sense of understanding and be responsible and patient.

✓ Childhood is an age when we do not have a sense of understanding, but in adulthood we develop understanding and become responsible and patient.

Pronoun/verb agreement: 'we is' should be 'we do not have' (subject-verb agreement and auxiliary). 'the age where' -> 'an age when' is more natural. 'adult age' -> 'adulthood'. Use 'become' rather than bare 'be' to indicate change. Improve word choice and sentence flow.