Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự tự nhiên và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, làm cho ý nghĩa không rõ ràng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và tránh lặp lại ý không cần thiết. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Example: No, I am not very patient. For example, when I have to wait in hospitals, I feel stressed because I worry about my health. Therefore, I find it hard to sit still and often walk around to distract myself.

Suggestion: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về lý do bạn cảm thấy thiếu kiên nhẫn.

Example: Many things make me feel impatient, but YouTube is the worst. The advertisements are often too long and confusing, which makes me tired of waiting. Because of that, I use ad blockers to avoid them.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên tổ chức câu trả lời theo cấu trúc rõ ràng, sử dụng liên từ và tránh lặp từ. Hãy cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể và chi tiết hơn.

Example: I usually feel stressed when I have to do something for a long time because I get easily distracted by things like video games or videos. For example, when I read three passages, I need to be very patient to finish them within an hour.

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời khá tốt nhưng câu trả lời có thể được cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và liên kết các ý với nhau. Hãy tránh lặp từ và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể.

Example: I am a student, so I don't have a job yet. However, studying requires a lot of patience because I have to focus for 45-minute sessions and wait all day to relax at home. Therefore, patience is important for me to improve every day.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để tự nhiên hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

Example: I was less patient as a child because I couldn't concentrate on subjects like math or English. Now, I train myself to be more patient and focused on my lessons and homework so that I can improve and get into a better university in the future.

× I cannot just sitting still.

✓ I cannot just sit still.

The verb 'cannot' should be followed by the base form of the verb, not the '-ing' form. 'Sitting' is incorrect here; it should be 'sit'.

× my illness helps.

✓ my illness gets better.

The phrase 'my illness helps' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'my illness gets better' or 'my illness improves'.

× YouTube might be one of the places the websites that make me feel impatient the most.

✓ YouTube might be one of the websites that make me feel impatient the most.

The phrase 'places the websites' is incorrect and redundant. It should be 'websites' only, as YouTube is a website.

× So tired to watch it waiting for the videos after the advertisements.

✓ I am so tired of watching it while waiting for the videos after the advertisements.

The phrase 'tired to watch' is incorrect; it should be 'tired of watching'. Also, 'waiting' needs to be connected properly with 'while'.

× I hate it and I use adblogs for YouTube because of that too.

✓ I hate it and I use ad blockers for YouTube because of that too.

The word 'adblogs' is incorrect; the correct term is 'ad blockers'.

× I usually feel stressful when I have to do something for a long period of time because I can be easily get distracted by many things like video games or videos or photos or anythings like when I do I also readings I have to be patient more for an hour to do all three passage.

✓ I usually feel stressed when I have to do something for a long period of time because I can easily get distracted by many things like video games, videos, photos, or anything. When I do readings, I have to be more patient for an hour to complete all three passages.

'Feel stressful' is incorrect; it should be 'feel stressed'. 'Can be easily get distracted' is incorrect; it should be 'can easily get distracted'. 'Anythings' is incorrect; it should be 'anything'. The sentence structure is also corrected for clarity.

× to do all three passage.

✓ to do all three passages.

The word 'passage' should be plural 'passages' because it refers to three items.

× I am a student so I don't have a job yet but being a student I need to be very patient because I have to study like 45 minute period and waiting for a whole day to be relaxed at home.

✓ I am a student so I don't have a job yet, but as a student, I need to be very patient because I have to study for about a 45-minute period and wait for the whole day to relax at home.

'Like 45 minute period' should be 'for about a 45-minute period'. 'Waiting' should be 'wait' to maintain parallel structure.

× to be relaxed at home.

✓ to relax at home.

The verb 'relax' is used here, not the passive form 'be relaxed'.

× But yes I have to be patient for a whole day, study and be better every day.

✓ But yes, I have to be patient for the whole day, study, and improve every day.

Added commas for clarity and changed 'be better' to 'improve' for better expression.

× When I was younger, I cannot concentrate to anything, any school subject like math, literature, English, anythings.

✓ When I was younger, I could not concentrate on anything, any school subject like math, literature, English, or anything.

'Cannot' should be past tense 'could not' to match 'was'. 'Concentrate to' is incorrect; it should be 'concentrate on'. 'Anythings' should be 'anything'.

× I have to train myself to be more patient, more concentrate to the subjects, to the lesson at school, to the homework, so I could be better and could go to the better universities.

✓ I have to train myself to be more patient, more concentrated on the subjects, the lessons at school, and the homework, so I can be better and go to better universities.

'More concentrate to' is incorrect; it should be 'more concentrated on'. 'Lesson' should be plural 'lessons'. 'Could' is changed to 'can' for present/future possibility.