Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is quite natural and relevant, but try to avoid filler phrases like 'you know' and be more concise. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct minor grammar errors, such as 'a very impatient person'.

Example: No, I am quite impatient, but I am trying to improve. Starting a new business has taught me to be more patient because I have to deal with customers and handle customs and imports carefully.

Suggestion: Your answer explains the reason well but lacks coherence and has incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and complete your thoughts. Avoid vague phrases like 'like not in my scenario'.

Example: I have always been impatient because my parents gave me whatever I wanted immediately when I was a child. Therefore, I never learned to wait, and now as an adult, I find it difficult to be patient.

Suggestion: Your answer shows your feelings clearly but is somewhat repetitive and unclear in parts. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and avoid repeating similar phrases.

Example: I usually lose interest and get tired when I have to do something for a long time. Although I feel frustrated and wish to finish quickly, I remind myself to be patient and keep going.

Suggestion: Your answer is detailed and relevant but could be more concise and avoid repetition like 'very, very, very'. Use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

Example: Yes, my small jewellery business requires a lot of patience because I have to deal with customers and also manage tasks like importing products, photographing them, and posting online.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and ends abruptly. Try to complete your sentences and use linking words to explain the change clearly.

Example: Yes, I am more patient now because as a child, my parents always gave me what I wanted immediately. Now, I understand the value of waiting and try to be more patient.

× I'm very impatient person

✓ I'm a very impatient person

In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Here, 'person' is singular and countable, so it needs the indefinite article 'a'. Without it, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× It is, you know, teaching me how to be patient more and more as I have to deal with people, customs, import, export and all that.

✓ It is, you know, teaching me how to be more patient as I have to deal with people, customs, import, export and all that.

The phrase 'how to be patient more and more' is awkward. The correct expression is 'how to be more patient' to indicate increasing patience. Also, 'import, export' should be treated as activities, so no article is needed here.

× I think since childhood I got instantly whatever I wanted whenever I wanted from my parents.

✓ I think since childhood I have gotten instantly whatever I wanted whenever I wanted from my parents.

The phrase 'since childhood' indicates a time period continuing to the present, so the present perfect tense 'have gotten' is appropriate instead of simple past 'got'. This shows the action started in the past and continues or has relevance now.

× Once I got older, I'm finding it very difficult to.

✓ Once I got older, I found it very difficult to be patient.

The sentence is incomplete and mixes past and present tense improperly. 'Once I got older' sets a past time frame, so the following verb should be in past tense 'found'. Also, the sentence lacks an object or complement after 'to', so 'to be patient' completes the meaning.

× I have a feeling that I have a thought that I have to be patient.

✓ I have a feeling that I need to be patient.

The phrase 'have a thought that I have to be patient' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'I have a feeling that I need to be patient' is clearer and more natural. Also, 'need to' is more appropriate than 'have to' in this context.

× Definitely the business that I own, a small jewellery business, it requires me to be very, very, very patient as I have to deal with customers and not only that but the behind the scenes I have to bring the products in, I have to shoot them, I have to post them.

✓ Definitely, the business that I own, a small jewellery business, requires me to be very, very, very patient as I have to deal with customers and, not only that, behind the scenes I have to bring the products in, shoot them, and post them.

The original sentence has redundant pronouns and awkward phrasing. Removing 'it' after 'business' avoids redundancy. Also, 'not only that but the behind the scenes' is corrected to 'not only that, behind the scenes' for clarity and correct preposition use. The verbs are better coordinated with 'and'.

× I am more patient now as I mentioned earlier that as a child I got whatever and whenever I asked for from my parents and they were very loving towards me.

✓ I am more patient now as I mentioned earlier that as a child I got whatever and whenever I asked for from my parents, and they were very loving to me.

The phrase 'loving towards me' is less common and slightly awkward. The correct preposition is 'loving to me'. Also, adding a comma before 'and' improves sentence clarity.