Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. For example, say "I believe I'm a patient person because I have faced many hardships at a young age, which helped me develop this valuable trait."

Example: Yes, I believe I'm a patient person because I have faced many hardships at a young age, which helped me develop this valuable trait.

Suggestion: Improve clarity and coherence by completing your thoughts and using linking words. For example, say "Waiting for something uncertain makes me anxious, which leads to impatience."

Example: Waiting for something uncertain makes me anxious, which leads to impatience.

Suggestion: Make your answer more direct and clear by structuring it well and avoiding awkward phrasing. For example, say "It depends on the activity; I enjoy long tasks if they interest me."

Example: It depends on the activity; I enjoy long tasks if they interest me.

Suggestion: Use clearer and more natural phrasing. For example, say "Yes, my career as a nurse requires patience and accuracy when dealing with patients."

Example: Yes, my career as a nurse requires patience and accuracy when dealing with patients.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and clarity by saying "Yes, I have become much more patient now than when I was a child because I have experienced many situations that required this skill."

Example: Yes, I have become much more patient now than when I was a child because I have experienced many situations that required this skill.

× I have undergone such hardships in lives in such a young age that I developed this valuable trait that is.

✓ I have undergone such hardships in life at such a young age that I developed this valuable trait.

The word 'lives' is incorrect here; the singular form 'life' should be used because it refers to the general experience of living. Also, 'in such a young age' should be 'at such a young age' because 'at' is the correct preposition for ages.

× I have undergone such hardships in lives in such a young age that I developed this valuable trait that is.

✓ I have undergone such hardships in life at such a young age that I developed this valuable trait.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'age'; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to age.

× It's probably having to wait for something that has a questionable and this makes me, uh, anxious, which leads me to result in feeling impatient.

✓ It's probably having to wait for something that is questionable, and this makes me anxious, which leads me to feel impatient.

The phrase 'has a questionable' is incomplete and incorrect; it should be 'is questionable'. Also, 'leads me to result in feeling' is redundant and awkward; 'leads me to feel' is correct.

× It's probably having to wait for something that has a questionable and this makes me, uh, anxious, which leads me to result in feeling impatient.

✓ It's probably having to wait for something that is questionable, and this makes me anxious, which leads me to feel impatient.

The phrase 'leads me to result in feeling' misuses prepositions; 'leads me to feel' is the correct form.

× It depends usually on what I'm doing, because I sometimes find long activities that I enjoy much more preferable.

✓ It usually depends on what I'm doing, because I sometimes find long activities much more preferable when I enjoy them.

The adverb 'usually' is better placed before the verb 'depends' for natural word order. Also, 'that I enjoy much more preferable' is awkward; rephrasing clarifies the meaning.

× Yes. As the path of my career that I'm leading acquires patience and accuracy when dealing with patients since I'm a nurse.

✓ Yes. The path of my career requires patience and accuracy when dealing with patients since I'm a nurse.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'As the path of my career that I'm leading acquires' is incorrect; 'The path of my career requires' is correct and clearer.

× Yes, I have become much more patient now than when I was a child because I undergoed much more situations that had to, that had that required such a skill in life.

✓ Yes, I have become much more patient now than when I was a child because I underwent many more situations that required such a skill in life.

The verb 'undergone' is the past participle and should be used with 'have'; the simple past is 'underwent'. Also, 'much more situations' is incorrect; 'many more situations' is correct because 'situations' is countable.