Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more concise. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are natural and coherent. For example, instead of 'I considered myself as a patient person', say 'I consider myself a patient person'. Also, avoid repeating 'situation' unnecessarily.

Example: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I usually stay calm and composed. However, in very difficult or unfair situations, I might get angry, but that happens rarely.

Suggestion: Your answer has grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Use correct vocabulary such as 'impatient' instead of 'unpatient'. Also, try to expand your answer with linking words to make it more natural and effective.

Example: I feel impatient when situations are unfair because it frustrates me. For instance, if someone is treated unjustly, I might get angry at that time.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but incomplete as it ends abruptly. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Avoid leaving sentences unfinished and ensure your answer is within 5 sentences.

Example: When I have to do something for a long time, especially if the work is intense, I often feel frustrated and tired. For example, focusing on a difficult task for several hours without a break drains my energy, and I might become annoyed. However, I try to take short breaks to refresh myself.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to answer directly and clearly. Also, avoid vague statements like 'all job required to be patient'. Instead, explain your point with proper grammar and structure.

Example: I am currently unemployed, so I do not have a job. However, I believe that most jobs require patience to handle different situations effectively.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using better vocabulary and sentence structure. Instead of 'tolerance power', use 'patience' or 'ability to tolerate'. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

Example: Yes, I remember that as a child, I used to get angry over small things. However, now I don't get angry easily, and my patience has improved significantly.

× Yes, I considered myself as a patient person because I usually mean calm and composed.

✓ Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I am usually calm and composed.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'considered' (past tense) instead of 'consider' (present tense) to match the current state. Also, 'mean' is incorrect here; 'am' or 'feel' is appropriate to describe oneself. The phrase 'myself as a patient person' should be 'myself a patient person' without 'as'.

× Sometimes when situations get unfair, it makes me unpatient and I might get angry on that time.

✓ Sometimes when situations become unfair, it makes me impatient and I might get angry at that time.

The word 'unpatient' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'impatient'. Also, 'get unfair' is better expressed as 'become unfair'. The preposition 'on' should be 'at' when referring to a specific time.

× When I have to do something for a long time, especially if the work is very intense, I often start to feel frustrated and tired. For example, if I have to focus on a difficult task for several hours without a break, I might become annoyed because it drains my energy. However.

✓ When I have to do something for a long time, especially if the work is very intense, I often start to feel frustrated and tired. For example, if I have to focus on a difficult task for several hours without a break, I might become annoyed because it drains my energy.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'However.' which is incomplete and causes a sentence structure error. Removing 'However.' resolves the issue.

× As I am unemployed now, I did not have any job but as all job required to be patient.

✓ As I am unemployed now, I do not have any job, but all jobs require patience.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly ('did not have' should be 'do not have' to match 'am unemployed now'). 'As all job' should be 'all jobs' (plural). 'Required to be patient' is better expressed as 'require patience'. Also, the sentence needs proper conjunction and punctuation.

× Yes, I really remember when I was a child I got angry even on the small things, but now I don't get angry easily and my tolerance power also improved.

✓ Yes, I really remember when I was a child I got angry even at small things, but now I don't get angry easily and my tolerance has also improved.

The phrase 'even on the small things' should be 'even at small things' for correct preposition use. 'Tolerance power' is better expressed as 'tolerance'. The verb 'improved' should be in present perfect 'has improved' to indicate a change from past to present.